I got this idea from another piece of work. It was one of those 'copy and paste on your profile' things that I found going around on a certain site, so I don't have a link for it, but it's pretty similar to this. Instead of a girl, a boy narrates it, and he talks about being friend zoned by his best friend. Anyway, it inspired this, which is pretty different, but it runs in sort of the same format. Hope you enjoy! Btw, I wasn't really sure whether to call this a story or a poem, so I just took a wild guess. If you disagree, please tell me where I should put this.
I’m sorry.
I’m sorry I’m not as pretty as the other girls
And that you don’t like my big nose and patchy skin.
I’m sorry I’m not super-model skinny
And that I’m not constantly dieting until my ribs stick out.
I’m sorry my breasts are smaller than average
And that I don’t like to show them off with low-cut tank tops.
I’m sorry I never cover my face with make-up
And that I believe that girls can be pretty without it.
I’m sorry I asked you out first, trying to be brave,
And that I didn’t wait for you to approach me as all girls are supposed to.
I’m sorry the dress I wore on our first date reached my knees
And that it wasn’t short and sexy like you wanted.
I’m sorry I tried to kiss you in front of your friends the next day
And that my actions left you so ashamed and embarrassed that you had to pull away.
I’m sorry I didn’t want to go out clubbing with you every night
And that I preferred to stay in and spend some quality time together.
I’m sorry I hung out with guy friends that made you jealous
And that I didn’t listen when you forbid me from talking to them ever again.
I’m sorry I tried to do the same with all the girls you were flirting with
And that I got angry when you laughed in my face and called me obsessed.
I’m sorry I told you I loved you even though you wanted a casual relationship,
And that I was hurt when you didn’t say it back.
I’m sorry I wouldn’t share a smoke or drink with you when we were bored
And that I actually cared about the things I put in my body.
I’m sorry I didn’t let you grope my chest the night my parents were out of town
And that I stormed out crying when you did it anyway.
I’m sorry I avoided you after school because I wasn't ready
And that I turned away whenever you called me a prude.
I’m sorry I screamed ‘no’ the first night you had sex with me
And that I told my friends what you had done.
I’m sorry I found out that I was pregnant
And that I refused to give up the baby that we had created.
I’m sorry I struggled when you beat me,
And that I didn’t cover up my bruises like all your previous girlfriends.
I’m sorry I blamed you when the baby died inside my stomach,
And that I told my parents so I could have some support.
But most of all…
I’m sorry for not being sorry anymore.
I’m not sorry I broke up with you
And that I stormed away because I was proud.
I’m not sorry I didn’t call you up later, crying
And that I never begged you to take me back.
I’m not sorry I realized that I was too good for you
And that I didn’t feel bad when you started hooking up with random girls.
I’m not sorry I found a new boyfriend a year later
And that I was finally happy because, unlike you, he actually treated me right.
I’m not sorry I’ve moved on,
And that you still haven’t.
I’m not sorry for being proud of who I am,
And that nothing you say can ever change that.
I’m not sorry that the only thing I’m sorry for
Is that I ever loved you to begin with.
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I am breathless. *O* How do you come up with all these amazing short stories? I am baffled by the simplicity of the words you used and how you made them so powerful. The story was so emotional. It told the story perfectly. It was full of emotion. It drove me to tears. It reminded me of 'Daughter of A Veteran'.
I loved the flow of the story. It was at a steady and reasonable pace and each stanza was bound to keep the reader interested to keep on reading. The pity in me for the unnamed female in this story was so strong I don't know how to describe it. Step by step, you describe how she falls apart and falls prey to the b*stard (sorry for the harsh language, in the middle of an emotional rush here) who takes advantage of her.
As I advance deeper into the story her situation becomes worse and the tears swell up in my eyes. Nearing the end, it completely changes. It lifts up the my spirits, puts a smile on my face, and as I reach the last stanza I felt proud for the girl in the story.
You are such a great writer. <3 Continue posting such awesome works.
Wow, thank you! It means so much that you liked this <3 (I almost cried while writing it, I got so into it XD).
wow , that was super touchy , sorry i can't review your amzing work , cause i'm speechless , omg that's one of top 5 works i've read since i registered in the site , very very good job , it deserve a '' like ''
keep it up
Hello. I read this poem or short story and was really moved by it because of the power of emotion you had put into it. This was well-written as it went through the things that she regretted and the things she hadn't regretted. I thought that your writing was unique the way you started with "I'm sorry" and then the last half was "I'm not sorry". That was a cool way to put it. Who is this girl though, I mean pregnancies, abusive boyfriends, and so much emotion! This isn't really a review because your punctuation and grammar was fine. At first, I was upset that she got herself into the mess with this boy but I felt a lot better by the end when she says,
"I'm not sorry for being proud of who I am,
And that nothing you say can ever change that."
That is a great line to show the girl's emotions. Great work and continue writing!
Wow, this is a very heart wrenching poem. It is really good! You put a lot of emotion in it that made me even feel the girl's emotions. You did an awesome job! Each stanza is very powerful and I really like how you wrote the ending.
"I’m not sorry I found a new boyfriend a year later
And that I was finally happy because, unlike you, he actually treated me right.
I’m not sorry I’ve moved on,
And that you still haven’t."
These are my favorites from your poem. Anyway, you did great!! And I really like it.
This poem is truly amazing. I loved it when the stanzas started to begin with "I'm not sorry." this work clearly teaches others how to pick themselves up after a harsh beginning.
It is a little personal for me.
"I’m not sorry for being proud of who I am,
And that nothing you say can ever change that."
That is my favorite quote from the poem. I absolutely loved it. Keep up the great work.
Dear God, this was awesome. It surprised me with all the twists it had… getting pregnant, losing the baby, etc… I can't review this because you've left me with nothing to nitpick. Awesome job!
Hey MysteryMe,
This was, wow. It was so full of emotion, and the concept was so clear, and so bold, it took my breath away.
This was your strongest stanza, for me at least. Before the girl seemed scared and frightened. But this line is where she really, emotionally comes out of her shell and shows she is brave. Perfect.
The very last line was the best way possible to end this poem.
Nothing to critique. Keep writing!
Hello MysteryMe!
The format of this poem is intrguing; I did not expect to see it when I clicked the link! Because of the use of the font, I thought it gave the story a different tone. For instance, the font in your story is very tiny and unconnected. I think it gives more depth to the one telling the story in terms of who she is. The use of this font in the story, which is told through the narrators words shows what kind of person she is, which at firstis a girl struggling to make her boyfriend happy by harming her own image and never just tries to be herself. The font supports that unconnected feeling she has with her boyfriend.
Something else I liked about this story was the redundancy of the "I'm sorry/I'm not sorry" line. You made sure that those lines were hammered into the reader's head to make the reader feel what the narrator was feeling too. Nice.
This next part might sound weird, but when the narator says " I'm sorry my breasts are smaller than average". By how the guy sounds throughout the story, one would think he'd want larger than average breasts on a girl. I apologize if that was inappropriate, but I thought that was sort of important for context.
One more thing: this stort seems to be in poem format, which isn't a big deal. It's your story, you choose where you want it be, I guess.
All in all, nice job. I like this piece. Keep writing.