Sorry if the formatting throws you off or anything. This is the first time I've submitted a song, well in the right category anyway. 
Tell me what you think, pretty please. And thank you a million times for taking the time to read my work. It really means a lot to me.
(slow)
It's not light yet.
Too dark to move a muscle.
Hold me right here
closer, tightly
and keep my head up for me
so I won't fall asleep.
It's cold.
We're alone and starving.
But that's alright because I
(upbeat)
I wanted you right here with me.
Through anything you said we'd be.
Like summer collapsing to fall.
Long awaited and amazing.
Like voices ringing "Freedom is ours again!"
(slow)
It's not right yet.
But I'm waiting patiently.
Kiss me, tell me
we'll be fine, dear.
And breathe close to me again
because I love your scent
I wanted you right here with me.
Through everything you said we'd be.
Like summer collapsing to fall.
Long awaited and amazing.
Like voices ringing "Freedom is ours again!"
I am trusting in you----giving you everything
You want my heart? Take it.
You want my life? It's yours, all for you.
I wanted you right here with me
Here with me! Here with me.
Through everything you said we'd be.
Like summer collapsing to fall.
Like voices ringing "Freedom is ours again!"
(slower)
I wanted you right here with me...
Hold me and say you love me.
And keep my head up for me
so I won't fall asleep.
I don't wanna miss the ending.
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This song was great!
I wish I could write songs with meanings..
But I'll try some more, though.
It's a pretty good romance song. Sounds like things you'd say to a real girlfriend, and maybe she'd love you back. Aside for some problems with rhyming, it was a really good song, and I would totally want to hear it live.
Ironically, I'm reviewing this to get points so I can post a song related to romance.
This was pretty nice romantic song. To be honest I am not good at critting super romantic songs. I like to critt heavy and hard lyrics. But their were romantic songs that got mt attention, but to b honest I did not think this song was the best but I do think this song was good. I just really feel like there is something missing in this song.
I like it a lot
.
It's a really sweet song, and it's got a lot of tone and voice to it.
The only thing that bothered me was the ending, the word 'ending'.
It seems too rough.
Other than that, I really liked the song. It was really good
i edited a few parts of my review I think I fucked up, sorry, so sorry
I can’t believe I’m going to say this but I think is a great song well just my opinion. Is a great song, I usually don’t write songs like this, I’m more like the kind of people who’s always saying peace and love. I don’t want to tell you to change something because I already like it the way it is, cool song again. I gave you a gold star