Published January 13, 2011
And of course nothing else matters…
Building a lie after another, that is what it was all about. I turned into something I did not believe in. how long has it been? I wonder… I miss smiling with all my heart and soul. Flashing my teeth is just another daily habit, why I ask? Simply hiding what lies beneath the surface. It is but a fact that we can only see the tip of an iceberg. Unhealed wounds, that s what my one ninth isn’t showing.
Stunned by the turn of events I thought I recovered, It hit me right in the face when I least expected it. Took me by surprise, still I managed to keep that dashing smile of mine as I conversed. Alone I was again and I simply lost control. All that bottled up emotion just over flowed. I hated myself and for the first time I cried.
After that I managed to keep that role, the one of the girl next door.
I am that broken record that was never fixed.
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Yeah, like armstronge said, I think you should put this into a poetic format with stanzas and lines and not just a paragraph. But this I truly enjoyed! It has great feeling and I loved it. Just some re-formatting(is that a word?!?!) would do the trick, I think. Well done and keep writing!
There's so much emotion in it! I love it! It's very touching alright. But you probably should cut the poem in to lines and stanzas because it's pretty hard to read when it's all a jumbo.
Other than that, it's great! I love this poem, tons of emotion and meaning in it! Keep writing and you'll get better! Great poem you have there!
Very touching. I loved it!