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I really love the rhyme scheme. You just need to capitalize a few words like wayne and capitalize words like cape. I don't know if this is your style or choice though. if it is, just ignore. But, if you really want to bring focus on Batman's character, mention his parents in the grave line and get rid of the wayne line since he doesn't identify with wayne; he identifies with Batman.

If you want to be more true to the comics, you can get rid of the "his name is wayne" line.

I really love the rhyme scheme. You just need to capitalize a few words like wayne and capitalize words like cape. I don't know if this is your style or choice though. if it is, just ignore. But, if you really want to bring focus on Batman's character, mention his parents in the grave line and get rid of the wayne line since he doesn't identify with wayne; he identifies with Batman.

If you want to be more true to the comics, you can get rid of the "his name is wayne" line.

This was very enjoyable. I'm not a big batman fan myself, but I still loved this poem. I didn't see much that could be worked on, except for maybe the last few lines.
"He is a man, who never ran, he is not just a man, they call him batman."
So, first she said, he is a man who never ran. You don't need a coma there, then you say he isn't just a man. That's confusing.
Also, with the last line, this is just me, but I always have the last line either not rhyme at all, or rhyme with the first sentence.
That's it though, you've made a really good poem that was very enjoyable.
As always, keep writing!

Hi muzzamil!

Hiraeth here for a review.

First, let me just say, Marvel is so much better than DC {if you wanna fight about it, bring it on! }.

But, yeah, okay, i can handle Batman I guess.

So, back to the poem.

You have some very nice rhymes; but as is often the case with such poems, readers will find that some of the rhymes seem forced (and i say this from experience, i used to force rhymes too). For example, these lines:

"He is brave,

Enough to dig a grave."

Digging a grave has nothing to do with bravery, you know? Gravediggers just do their job, man, it's not like their life is in mortal peril, you know what I mean? So when readers read this, they'll think, Wow, this makes absolutely no sense , and that is something you do not want the reader to think.

Nombre Deux: Grammar

You have some grammatical errors, which I'll list out one by one

- "It's also asylum. " : you need an 'an' before asylum, i.e, the line should be: " It's also an asylum."

-"A man in Cape" should be "A man in a cape.
-"The master of the brain" sounds better if you write, "The master of the brain"
-And lastly, "As fearsome as bat" should be "As fearsome as a bat."

To err is human, mauzzamil. There is always room for improvement, and that is why why we review, why there are critics.

Keep writing, confound us with you next piece!