Girl he's gonna break your heart. Girl you haven't figured him out yet. Why do you think you can change him, when you can't even change yourself.
Oh now your saying you're in love, he has rescued you and taken you off somewhere. You know it's just a play in his eyes, cause he's really good at this lie. He liked me before he met you he's settling is that what you want him to do?
Well your saying, he's figured you out. when you know he wont be here next year he'll be moved on to the NEXT best thing. You'll be crying. Don't think about him. Thing's will take the course there made
Oh now your saying you're in love, he has rescued you and taken you off somewhere. You know it's just a play in his eyes, cause he's really good at this lie. he liked me before he met you he's settling is that what you want him to do?
I saw him the other day he was with her. you think he wont leave. I'm telling you every guy will. You have your suspicions, I've had them all along. Why are you with him your so much better than that.
Oh now your saying you're in love, he has rescued you and taken you off somewhere. you know it's just a play in his eyes, cause he's really good at this lie. he liked me before he met you he's settling is that what you want him to DO
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I like this song! I'm not going to mention the grammar mistakes in details (since it's already been done), but I must say that they take away from the song. Also, titles have all caps (minus words like 'and,' 'of,' and 'the').
It sounds like something that I've wanted to tell my friend's before and I think people can relate to it very easily.
Now that that's out of my system, I can say that this is an awesome song.
Good job.
First off, let me start by saying Welcome to YWS" and all that comes with it..
This piece of literature has a lot of grammatical errors, but fear not! For help is on the way!
* gallops in on noble steed*
We commence.-
This looks like a song, but it doesn't seem to be going anywhere. All you seem to be doing is repeating yourself and the grammatical errors really are distracting.
First, the title should be, "You're saying you're in love".
OK. Heya. I'm Ladypurple and I wanna welcome you to YWS!! Anyway, your song has many errors.
When using things like, "It's, Isn't, and Won't" remember something: say them seperated before putting it down so you know it works.
Example:
"It's a rainy day."
"#FF0000 ">It is a rainy day."
I couldn't find any spelling errors as I scanned the page again. You forgot to capitalize an "I" (I'm sure that was an accident) and you didn't capitalize the first letter in a new sentance. You also didn't quite punctuate right. Also, you have some missplaced commas.
If I'm coming across as mean, I do not mean it. Anyway, onto the main message of the piece.
The message is a good one about how a guy will play a few girls. But when you said "every guy will" I disagree. Not all guys will. And about "your" and "you're". "you're" is "you are" not "your". Also, you should re-word some parts.
It's a nice song just needs some fixing up.
~Ladypurple.