December 21st, 2012- 3:47 A.M.
An angry President Obama trudged through the frigid snows of a Himalayan mountain, back hunched against the biting wind. Stumbling every now and then from near-exhaustion, he pressed onwards.
The absurdity of his mission wasn't lost on him; in fact, no one knew better than he what an act of pure desperation this truly was. Three years ago, when everything seemed so hopeful, he could never have imagined doing anything like this, especially with so little information to rely on. But times had changed, and they had changed for the worst; if you weren't willing to fight for what was rightfully yours to own, then you had no place in the world.
The President felt the icy ground beneath his feet sharply steepen as he began what was hopefully the last stage of his journey...up the very side of the mountain.
Despite himself, Obama felt a surge of hope run through him. This is it! he thought as he quickened his step. It's just up here. A little farther and this'll all be over.
The rough and treacherous path he followed lead him up the side of the mountain--with a sheer drop of terror awaiting him on his right should he take a misstep. He did his best to fit his back to the cliff wall with arms outstretched on either side to keep balance.
As he stared down below his frozen toes at the sharp rocks waiting for him at the base of the mountainside, sudden doubt clawed at him.
What if the prophet was incorrect? Or worse, a sham? What would that mean for his country (but more importantly, for his Presidency)? What could he do then, if he didn't find what he was looking for here?
The answer was nothing. Absolutely nothing.
In all honesty, he'd never meant for it to go this far. He knew he'd been warned time and again, but back then, what did a few nuclear bombs matter? If nothing else, it taught his enemies to fear America--as they should! With one for North Korea, two for Japan, three for China and a whopping seven for those damned Russians, he thought they all would have gone scurrying away to their hidey-holes with their tails between their legs.
How wrong he'd been.
Instead, an unthinkable number of enemies and former Allies had united against the U.S. with the sole purpose to retaliate--and teach the Americans a lesson.
It didn't quite work out as Obama planned. Or rather, it went the total opposite.
Back in those days, he'd been too proud to simply admit his mistakes and accept the punishments required of him. Instead, he fought back.
Disaster ensued. Millions died in a fight that none truly understood. Lines were crossed, borders were shattered, and monarchies crumbled as the Third and final World War ran its course.
The war was relatively short, as wars go, lasting a scant two years, but both sides paid dearly for every minute spent in battle. In the first three months of warfare alone nearly twelve million died in unprecedented amounts. For two whole years this continued, until one day it simply stopped. All fighting ceased (save for minor tussles in isolated areas), with no understanding or reason why.
Innocent bystanders speculated that the leaders of both forces had made a secret pact to stop all hostility towards one another--after all, it was clear neither side would walk away with any kind of victory at the current pace of things. So it only made sense that they would see this and make an effort to control their own fury at one another. This theory, and varying forms of it, was the general consensus that the public had come to on its own.
Those higher up knew better. And the truth was, it was a stupid war; a calculated, vicious war, yes, but stupid. Both sides had suffered losses in nearly unimaginable numbers, and it would take years to repair all the damage done--physically, mentally, and politically.
So they stopped. No secret meetings took place; no new pact was formed; no treaties signed. They simply...ceased.
For some, the breaking point was the assassination of Queen Elizabeth II. For others, the controversial suicide of the Pope, whose final words before he killed himself were "Memento mori!" or "Remember your mortality." The ancient Latin saying gave pause to many.
He was broken from his musings of the past when suddenly a warm glow illuminated the snow up ahead. He quickened his pace to see it.
The light was spilling out from a natural archway carved out of the side of the mountain. Obama smiled in anticipation and stepped through the doorway.
Inside, out of the wind and snow, he was instantly warmer. He was standing in a small, circular room made of smooth stone walls. It was generally featureless, save for a large object placed squarely in the center of the room. It was from it that the golden light originated.
He took off his snow-caked gloves and he slowly walked to the box. It was larger than he thought it would be--nearly five feet across and three feet high. As he ran a hand over it, he hesitated in surprise. The material the box was made of appeared to be wood, but felt cold and smooth like metal.
Under its lid lay the solution. Whatever it may be, he needed it. Wanted it...
Time was wasting.
He braced his hands against the lid and heaved.
And the world exploded in a flash of impossible fire. Pain seared through him; pain like he'd never felt before, never imagined could exist. Light blinded him--and kept shining even in that darkness. Pure white was dark compared to this light, and he couldn't stand it. He felt his very foundations on the earth being torn to shreds and simply ceasing to exist.
What had he done?
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'Ello, ultraviolet here! Because I like numbering things so well (I really do
) that's what I'll do here.

1. Okay, so putting a real person -- especially one so famous as Obama -- is generally a no-no, just because you're putting words in another's mouth. I'm not saying that you can't, but think about this. Is the 2012 thing really vital to the story? Or could you set another doomsday? Because I think that if you put this even a few years in the future, or even have the war start in Obama's presidency, you could make up a new president, make them your own. The person could even go up on the mountain and complain a bit about what Obama left him, but not in a non-likeable way.
2. As for the war itself, the nukes are a bit unbelievable. I'd start with maybe one huge attack, and then have all battle after be smaller scale -- but still large scale -- attacks and invasions. It'd seem more reasonable, while still being earth shattering.
3. Deux Ex Machina. That's your ending, like it or not. Sure, you talked about the prophet, but not what about. Give us some foresight, and make it more believable. Please. You'll thank me later.
Other than those main problems, I do like this. I like the descriptions and how it flows, which is, smoothly. This is, in all, good writing. It just needs to be made more believable.
Keep writing.
loveness, ultraviolet <3
Hi
The small things:
Why in the world would the president believe in a prophet? Also, Obama basically just finds what I assume is Pandora's Box without any need of actual directions. How did he managed to locate the alcove straight away? Even when I have Google maps at my fingertips I still get lost driving to somewhere I don't know. This is the Himalayas, not some well documented Botanical Gardens.
Thirteen nuclear bombs. Assuming that these nuclear bombs are the real deal, standard military blow-the-sh*t-out-of-everything bombs, the devastation would be colossal. Everything within a radius of two hundred kilometres of the bomb explosion would suffer third degree burns - absolute incineration. Japan is 377,835 km^2. Three nukes would be able to demolish Japan entirely. Tokyo alone has 13 million people, Japan has 130 million collectively. You mention that within the first three months 12 million people die. If Obama had targeted Tokyo with one of his strikes, 13 million would have died the very day the war started.
Realistically, who exactly would be able to retaliate? South Korea would be suffering for the fallout, in fact, the nuclear winter would extend everywhere. The radiation would kill millions and deform hundreds of thousands and any babies in wombs or conceived during the fallout.
lol, probably because the human race had been wiped out due to radiation poisoning.
This is probably the most believable thing yet. Twice one man has managed to get into the Queen's bedchamber to talk to her at night. The second time led to the discovery that the panic button in the Queen's rooms were actually dysfunctional and the man was talking to the Queen for over an hour before he was arrested.
The sentence of suicide is to go to hell. For the holiest man in the world to commit such mortal sin is absolutely unbelievable.
Well, I liked this story, but I found the basis of the Third World War a tad unbelievable based on common knowledge about nuclear bombs
Comments/suggestions are welcome, simply reply to this thread.
- Jai