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Break

by Morrigan


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

If you want to hear vaguely what it sounds like, here's a scratch track for you: https://soundcloud.com/user-94304088/break-scratc...

Critique welcome! Well, actually you can stay away from my voice because I cannot change it, but everything else is fair game. 

You don't get to be a dick to me
then run away, oh
You are gonna get what you came for: 
a fight, oh
Mama told me to turn the other cheek,
but I don't think I will this time.
You call me your friend, but how do you
justify that when I'm walking on eggshells?

Give me a break
from your anxiety.
Give me a break
or just take it out on me. 
I don't care which it is. 
I want to be your friend,
but it is what it is. 
It is what it is. 

Your guerrilla tactics are getting old.
It's a shame, oh
You should get a new plan 
to save face, oh
I listened to you cry, so I know why
you're acting out this way. 
But it doesn't change what you said to me
and I'll show you the error of your ways. 

Give me a break
from your anxiety.
Give me a break
or just take it out on me.
I don't care which it is.
I want to be your friend,
but it is what it is--

Give me a break
from your anxiety.
Give me a break
or just punch me in the face.
I don't care which it is.
I want to be your friend,
but it is what it is.


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Thu Jul 30, 2020 3:49 pm
Rosewood wrote a review...



I always enjoy reading the lyrics and hear the talented people on YWS sing, and from what I have seen, you're one of my favorites. The lyrics flow smoothly, breaking off at the right parts and the notes being held at the others. (Very generic, but still true.) They remind me of friendships that I and people I've known have been through, so there's no doubting it's painfully realistic. in short, I have no complaints whatsoever, and I look forward to reading/hearing your other pieces.




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ChrisCalaid wrote a review...



Hi, Morrigan. I'm here for a quick review.
You really have a lovely voice! I love the lyrics of this song! I truly love listening to your music, it's beautiful. The guitar really helps the beat and the rhyme and I think you did an amazing job on this song and its lyrics.
That's all I've got to say. I can't find a single mistake in this and I don't think I dare to suggest anything about this gorgeous music, not that I have any.

Have a good day!

Best wishes,
Chris





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