Young Writers Society

Hello there Morgan!

This is Kostia dropping in for a review.

I saw this work of yours under the other section and I thought to comment on it since its review day and I was captured by the title.

I am not really sure how to call this. It could be an essay with some work or an article though.

Overall the content was fairly good. You did have some good points however, to me some of them were quite obvious. I thought you would expand more on friendship and even note some incidents or add simile. The part about friendship you have so far includes the average thoughts and views. I would like to see something deeper than that.

With that being said, I wanted to add that I don't see how friendship and peer pressure are related. I am a psychology graduate so I am well aware of that phenomenon. Peer pressure is not a behaviour restricted to the individuals friends or social cycles. Peer pressure can occu at any time, at any age and very often it is unintentional.

So I believe for what you said about being young and people want to change who you are doesn't really stand. Peer pressure is a general phenomenon. Peer pressure can come from society norms rather than individual.

I believe we have all felt it and we will also feel it again. The one thing that is important is to be aware and well informed about it.

I believe you have somehow confused opinions regarding that subject. I would suggest to do some research on peer pressure if you decide to edit this. If I was you I would take the friendship part and turn it into something else.

Overall it wasn't a bad read. Your punctuation was satisfactory and your vocabulary simple, smooth and easy to comprehend. You had some grammar errors which will be obvious when you read this outloud.

For instance:

"but what is exactly is a true friend?"

you have repetition of "is" although this seemed unintentional.

Apart from my knowledge and opinion on the subject, I think you did pretty good in writing this.

I hope my points and suggestions were helpful. If you need any additional info on the matter, feel free to let me know! Keep writing!

Best regards
Kostia

I would just... stop. Stop meeting with them, stop being involved in any way with them, etc. I would still acknowledge them, say hi, you know. But definitely distance myself from them.

I think we feel peer pressure in our everyday lives. There is a good sort of peer pressure and a bad sort.

The good kind is when your friend encourages you to get better grades or to try out for a sport they know you like. etc

The bad kind is trying to get you to bully people or spread rumors. etc

With the bad sort you feel like you have to do it or you won't be considered one of the gang. You think you'd be considered a loser.

I have felt both kinds before and I tell myself: I don't need their approval. i would rather do the right thing then be popular.

If I found out someone I knew was pressuring a friend I would tell them to leave them alone and not to do that. If they don't stop then I'd get an adult involved. I really hope someone would do the same for me if I was being pressured in front of them.

But that's all I have to say. I hope you enjoyed my answer and I hope you make a part three.

-Jade Lotus

Hi...I’m Morgan.
The Teenage Mind is a piece of work that asks teenage related problems. Although, peer pressure doesn’t have to be just for teenagers. It could be part of something almost anyone feels at any age.

So I would like to keep this going and I hope for some more suggestions on what my next one should be about. Tag me, pm me, or post it on my wall. I’ll always be welcome to some more ideas. Also, I’m new to this whole shabang so yeah..lol!
Anyway, I hope you enjoy!