[ verse 1]
I hold my breath, and fall to my knees.
I can feel the walls closing in on me.
If I could have another wish,
It’ll have to be free from this anguish.
[pre-chorus]
‘Cause I’m scared and I’m frightened
Of the monster inside of me.
Oh, tell me if I will ever be free.
I’m holding it in, keeping it down.
Not telling no body.
[chorus]
Oh, but I know that you can hear me.
I know that you can feel me.
I know that you can feel my heart breaking in two,
So that’s why I’m looking up at the Heavens at you.
Oh, So can awnser my prayers?
Can you send me some angles?
I don’t ask for much, and you know that.
All I’m asking is for is a little help.
Just to help me stop the bleeding.
All I’m asking for. . .is a little saving.
[verse 2]
Hiding in the dark corners.
Still lost and I’m searching for the answers.
It only digs in the knife deeper
When I’m trying to pretend I’m happier.
[pre-chorus 2]
‘Cause I’m scared and I’m frightened
Of the monster inside of me.
Oh, tell me if I will ever be free.
I’m holding it in, keeping it down.
Not telling no body.
[chorus 2]
Oh, but I know that you can hear me.
I know that you can feel me.
I know that you can feel my heart breaking in two,
So that’s why I’m looking at the Heavens at you.
Oh, So can awnser my prayers?
Can you send me some angles?
I don’t ask for much, and you know that.
All I’m asking is for is a little help.
Just to help me stop the bleeding.
All I’m asking for. . .is a little saving.
[Bridge]
The world decides to break my soul,
And I find myself out of control.
Holding on by a thread.
and watching all my dreams go dead.
[chorus 3]
Oh, but I know that you can hear me.
I know that you can feel me.
I know that you can feel my heart breaking in two,
So that’s why I look up at the Heavens at you.
Oh, So can awnser my prayers?
Can you send me some angles?
I don’t ask for much, and you know that.
All I’m asking is for is a little help.
Just to help me stop the bleeding.
All I’m asking for. . .is a little saving.
Hello Morgan!!
I really love this song you made!!
Its really touchy and it has a lot of feeling.
I can tell you worked hard on this and i really love that.
I feel that a lot of people could compare and use this song for a few reasons.
This really got me thinking a lot too, questions we asked but are not answered..
I really enjoyed this and this really made me think.
I hope you have a great rest of your day!!
Keep up the good work!!
Sincerely Anma
Hello!
I really enjoyed what you have here. And by enjoy, I mean it hit me pretty hard. It hit close to home for me. You did a brilliant job expressing the feeling of anxiety or depression just taking over a fragile human heart. It's such a painful experience in more ways than one, and you clearly understand that kind of torture. You did extremely well.
I'm going to trust that the lyrics are asking for some angels, not angles. 
When it comes to reading lyrics, I have to go solely on content. I trust that it fits the music, assuming you have some. If not, then phrasing could use a fine-tooth comb through the piece. The best part about lyrics though is that the rhythm of the music can make these phrases work anyway. So I'm going to just skip over this part and go straight to the content.
Like I said before, I just really love how well you captured this feeling. It's all too familiar to me.
[chorus]
Oh, but I know that you can hear me.
I know that you can feel me.
I know that you can feel my heart breaking in two,
All I’m asking is for is a little help.
Just to help me stop the bleeding.
All I’m asking for. . .is a little saving.
Hello there Morgan!
I am Kostia and I will give you a brief review and a constructive criticism on your work.
Disclaimer:
1. Lyrics are not really my strong suit.
2. I will not get into spelling or grammar since I am not a native speaker.
Taking under account your young age this is very good. You have a lot of emotion in it which is crucially important when writing lyrics. I liked your phrasing for the most part. I think some words are too strong and could be replaced. Your content was satisfactory over all. It was emotional and touching so you did a great work there.
However I believe you have to narrow it down a bit. Try to say more and write less. What I am suggesting is for you to find a way to capture the meaning in fewer words. Lyrics are very different from poems. I believe you have to make it easier to relate to and work on your chorus a bit.
Moreover, I would like it to have more repetition in it. I think it came to be too informative in some parts.
The overall idea is very good and it looks like it is based in real feelings. I enjoyed that element but I believe it needs some editing.
Other than that it was a great effort, and a pleasent read. I believe there is some potential in it. Keep writing and always remember that practice makes perfect.
Best regards
Kostia
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