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Misspurplegirl,
Maybe this isn't supposed to be under the "poem" category because it sort of looks like a Article. But its a nice little piece. Their full of questions and make us rewind the thought of the question "Where does time go?" and actually, for a second or two, we think about it. I think you bought that out nicely.
I thought you kept repeating some circumstances again and again, which was kind of a little cliche. Because now that we know it, its time to go on to the next. And I guess VeerenVKS has already spotted down the nitpicks for you. ^^
From what I've noticed, I think you'll be good at writing Public Speaking Speeches. I love the fact how you get the meaning across which is very important for a speech. So, well done!
Keep Writing! ~
ChocoCookie
While this is a nice piece, I'm not sure why it's classified under poetry. I guess you could say it has a 'poetic feel', but it's not real a straightforward poem.
"Look how old you are! Where does time go?" [An old lady says to you]. [It] [s]ounds so cliche[,] [d]oesn't it? But don't you ever stop to wonder, where DOES time go? Where does it actually go when [we're through with it]. [Like] [t]hese past couple of minutes I spent writing this[,] [they are] banished from my life. I will never get them back! So again I ask, "Where DOES time go?" I [can] imagine what it is like to live in a place where there is no time[,] [and] [t]hat is when I realize, [that] place is [the] afterlife. [I]t is Heaven. Heaven is the place where you will never hear clocks ticking. [There is] [n]o such thing as 'wasted time['.] The possibilities are endless! The sun will never go down and whisper to us, "Time is up for today." Time is so [unappreciated(?)], [but] so powerful. Time is mistreated, wasted, and squandered. I wish I could take back the time I... no[,] [t]hat is too much wishful thinking. You will NEVER get [those] moment[s] back. Ever. Is [it] lost somewhere around the vicinity of our brains? Or is it locked down deep inside our hearts. Where does time go?
That being said, I do have to say this does give you something nice to think about after reading it.
I think for the first time, I'm going to make corrections in my review, just to help you out with future writing.
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That's the best I could do.
Good work other wise, and good luck with your writing.