Published September 13, 2008
I know he loves you
I see it in his eyes
he believes he has found
the right love in you
So please will you hold him tight
will you keep him warm from
the cold at night
like I would do if he was mine
So maybe I really wasn`t right for him
but I still wish him all the best
that he could ever get
So promise me you`ll be his shelter
if he needs a place to hide
promise me you`ll dry his tears
if he ever should cry
like I would do if he was mine
Just stay by his side
Without any lies
Take him as a special gift
that is given only once
like I would do if he was mine
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I really like this. It's too short to be a song, but this is very beautiful and sweet. Nice work. You have some serious potential.
Oh, no. I'm tempted to copy this and use it in my musical. It would fit so well if I changed the gender tags...
Oh, one little thing:
I think you should change this to "If he should ever cry". It will flow a bit better.
Other than that, this was outstanding. Nice work!
*Stars*
i really really really really really really really really really really really realy really really really really really really really really like it.
it is very emotional and i can feel ewhat you are feeling good job!
not only lyrics but definately poetry. it is short, sweet and very well written.
you have captured a lot of feeling from this
you are missing a question mark after the word night in this sentence 'So please will you hold him tight
will you keep him warm from
the cold at night'
this is really really great and actually very emotional from the writers sense.
well done
hope i have helped
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