Different is the way I walk
and different is the way I sing my songs
to you,
but that is what makes me unique
'cause there's nobody else like me
I don't care about the fashion
because I've got my own style
Oh I've got my own little world
where the sun always shines
even when the day is gray
I see the colours in my sky
So if someone ever tells
that you are not what they expect you to be
then they are blind and just can't see
the one thing I certainly know
that there's nobody else like you.
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hi..... I thought this was very good! i liked it a lot. I like the part where it says:
I don't care about the fashion
because I've got my own style
Oh I've got my own little world
where the sun always shines
I find this really awesome. I love how you said the part about not caring about fashion. These are my favourite lines. I really loved it!
this is a very well thought out and meaningful poem
good work. you have got some really great lines in here. in fact here are some of my favourites...
'So if someone ever tells
that you are not what they expect you to be
then they are blind and just can't see
the one thing I certainly know
that there's nobody else like you.' ok so that was more than a line but it is my favourite verse; by including the reader, you have made this poem even more successful!
and i also love your first to lines.
i think some bits need editing and those i will point out now...
1) Firstly, add in more punctuation because the poem lacks it a bit. Punctuation will help maintain a steady rhythm and also make it easier for the reader to read.
Even if its only the basic comma u add, it will definately help!
2) maybe edit the second verse a little. i think it needs just that little bit more care with what u r saying to make it flow and sound as good as the other verses. Though i bring it up , it isnt a major flaw or nefin!
great work with this poem!
hope i have helped
bisquit