Death has become a common thing on the streets today
People broadcasting it, like it was their name
Days come by, Someone says
I lost a friend
And it goes on
Greed has become a common taste on your tongues lately
People envying rags with money
People with Mercedes’ parked on their doorstep
People who’ve got as much money as a king times ten
Abomination has become a common sensuality
People hating like there’s no tomorrow
Cursing without words of sorrow
What ever happened to peace and equality?
Devotion and content?
What ever happened to our lives?
When did they become so complicated?
What ever happened to our words, we said we’d vow.
What ever happened to the days that were once ours?
What are we now?
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Hello Sam,
, The "which" was a typo, excuse me 
Thank you for the review
Hi there! My name's Sam and I'm your reviewer for today!
I like this line. It's so true.
Which is the wrong word here. You were probably trying to eliminate the repetition of who, but if you change it to whose, it doesn't sound as...awkward.
Over all, I like this poem! It's very true and heartspoken.
Good work!
Sam