Void absence

by Mikko

  • Lyrics

Published December 18, 2011

Spoiler! :
YAY ! I’m so happy. I’ve actually written a song I’m quite proud of ;D. It’s been a while, but I think I’m getting rid of this laziness/procrastination/laziness/writer’sblock/laziness thing xD. And I think I have the perfect tune but unfortunately I don’t have any musical talent so I’ll try to get someone to play the tune and I’ll post it… maybe.


Void absence


V1

They say a bird can’t fly with broken wings,
there’s no thunder without lightning;
no life exists without the sun,
only the darkness lives on.


V2

They say no blood would course through your veins
if it wasn’t for the air you breathe,
but all I feel is empty electricity,
the current flowing away from life.


Chorus

Because when you’re away
I’m just a body with no soul,
I decay a little more each day.
It’s like over me
the mountains are crashing
and drowning into the sea,
falling helplessly
in your void absence.


V3

I’m buried in a long winter’s snow,
you return like the awaited spring time,
my heart blossoms up again –
no longer lonely and cold.


V4

Take hold of my numb hand once more,
send your love radiating through me
‘cause I’ve missed you like the rain
in the dry Saharan desert.


Bridge

There’s an earthquake in my heart when you’re gone,
but I’m no longer crying tears.
Glaciers melt and flood my world
and I’m drowning into the sea,
falling helplessly, helplessly…


Chorus (x2)


End

Take hold of my numb hand once more,
send your love radiating through me;
you, to me, are like summer:
you give me butterflies.

Comments & reviews · 2
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JabberHut
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JabberHut wrote a review Review · Jan 31, 2012

MIKSTER.

I just read it. And I love it.

but all I feel is empty electricity,
the current flowing away from life.


What's empty electricity feel like? D: I'm not quite sure what it is. BUT. I did love the tie between the first two verses with the electricity/lightning thing. Dunno if that was planned, but it was really awesome. 8D

It’s like over me
the mountains are crashing
and drowning into the sea,


I'm kind of kicking this metaphor back and forth. It's a bit different from the rest of your metaphors. This one doesn't compare to a significant absence -- just destruction. But, I mean. the metaphor works here, it's just different from the rest of the song. I'm not sure if that's a good or bad thing though, which is why I'm just rambling and making no sense right now i'mgoigntomoveonnowsorry.

Actually, that's all I have. xD!

The title seemed a bit redundant since void is absence. It sounds cool, but I don't know how effective it is.

Also, it'd be cool if the ending verse had some tie-back to electricity or a current flowing through the speaker. Or something. I dunno, just something that ties in with the rest of the song!

Your imagery is absolutely stunning -- those metaphors were very divine. They all shared the same meaning with a similar nature-esque quality. So awesome.

Beautiful job. <3

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!

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lili024
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lili024 commented Comment · Dec 18, 2011

Is it just me, or you are AMAZING in writing songs!
I couldn't find any grammatical mistakes (I think...), so I'm only going to say KEEP IT UP!
Send me more of your work please!
Lili



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