Young Writers Society

Hi there!

Figured I'd come leave a review since I think this poem is awesome

I'll start with a flyby of your poem: it's a poem that personifies anger and everything that comes with it.

Now, this is something I don't normally do because I like to review from beginning to end, but I wanted to start with talking about the ending. I feel like you missed a big opportunity to make this more powerful than it already is. Let's look at the last three lines:

It is this thing called Anger, and you better beware

If you let it take over nothing will it spare

Anger

(I don't know if the last 'anger' here is meant to be part of the poem or not seeing as it's in italics, but I'm just going to assume it is) In this entire poem, the word 'anger' isn't mentioned once until these last three lines when it's mentioned twice. We're sitting here reading through this poem, wondering what it's even about. Then we reach that third to last line and it's all revealed, yet the poem isn't over yet. It's almost like the climax of a story, the great reveal, and then everything trickles down after that. The thing with poetry is, you don't have to have that. Sometimes the most powerful image/feeling/whatever comes at the very end and you can just leave it as that. Personally, I think that would've made for a stronger ending.

I'll move onto nitpicks (which I enjoy much more in poetry than prose because every word counts and all that jazz):


I want to applaud you on your rhyming. To be honest, I didn't even realize it was a rhyming poem until I read through it to specifically look for things. Reading it through just to enjoy it, I didn't notice the rhyming. It's cool how you were able to camouflage that and not let it take away from the overall feeling/message of the poem.

There is no punctuation at the end of the lines of this poem, which is perfectly fine. In fact, I like the way it reads. Anger is something that comes and goes so quickly that you don't even think about it. So to have a poem that goes on and on without a seeming end, really represents the overall image you're trying to portray here. However, I do want to suggest maybe adding a break, either a period or creating a new stanza, between the lines "The chaos complete, it settles once more" and "But if it is riled it will scrape to the core". The only reason I bring that up is because it feels like two different parts of the poem. Up to line 13, the poem focuses on the intensity and evilness of anger. The images are sharp and intense, anger filled even. Then starting at line 14, the images become softer (in language at least) and less direct. Those lines don't exactly fit perfectly with the earlier ones. A break would really separate the two overall images and really make the reader think.

Now, about the title. Is there a specific reason why you called this Poem? You know, besides the obvious that it's a poem? The title doesn't really seem to have any relation to the message of the poem. The poem is about anger and the harsh sides of it, but that's not reflected in the title. I don't need to lecture you about titles because I know you know all about them, so I'll just leave you with this. Really think about your title. It can be yet another dimension that adds to your poem.

Overall this is a very well written poem. The message is clear and the writing is solid. I didn't see any breaks in the flow except for the few small ones I pointed out. It's a common subject that I see in a lot of writing, but you did well making it your own and creating something powerful from it. I really enjoyed it

Keep writing!
**Noelle**