Published August 20, 2008
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Simply marvelous! You put alot more detail into how the setting looked, making it seem making it as if you were really there, looking at the graden! Well done.
Awsome twist!
I love mystery things like this.
I do think it's kind of mean but hey, it keeps her guessing, year?
Very well written and descriptions are great. You showed what she will miss and why. Nice!
Well, I'm off!
oh wow.
i seems kind of cruel that she has to guess who her suitors are and that she has to move out of her house, the one she grew up in.
i will definitely not wait until tomorrow to read the other chapter. i am off to read the others right now.
good luck on continue the writing.
I love the rewrite, Merry! You included so much more stuff and the pace was perfect!
Bravo to you!
Comma after "relatives" and after "Ashworths"
Comma after "it"
Missing the word "with". Slip it in between "filled" and "vegetable"
"stories" instead of "story"
Other than that, I have no other complaints.
On to Chapter Two>>>>>