Young Writers Society

Hello! Here to review your poems!

I'm impressed by the fact that you wrote this from an album! That is super cool! I also enjoy that there are 3 different parts, however, I don't know if they are connected? They seem as if they could be, and also aren't. So that maybe just a little confusing, but I like it, so you don't have to change it if that's how you like it.

With the format, I actually like it. I know that's not as normal for a poem, but it's a different feel. It makes the poem seem like if a poem and a story had a baby . Also, it adds a more emotional aspect. I can tell all the feelings of the narrator!

Just one thing I am a little confused about is this line-

"There is nothing to fear — fear the avant-garde"

It is a little confusing, but I think after rereading I get a little better feel of what it means. However, I am still iffy because it just doesn't fit I guess. Other than that these, or this poem is really good! I will be reading more of your work! Great job again!

_ From your friend,
@PlainandSimple _

I love it!
Hey there MehraZulAzim! I am here for a review.
Review: In 1, I don't understand what you mean by this: There is nothing to fear-fear the avant-grade.
Can you clear it up? So readers can understand.

And I think you don't need - in few lines.

After comma please go to next line and write. It's too crowded. That isn't how poem should be and what readers should feel.

Just my curiosity taking over. What is that 1,2 and 3 before another stanza and after one is finished?

Is there any reason you wrote this peom?
No offense in all the things.

Enjoyed reading.

Keep on writing!
>Chris Dixon

Love this!
I like all the word choices and writing style. I like how it's divided into pairs of lines. You have managed to say everything you wanted to in a short text.

All in all a very well written poem.

I really like this poem. It's definitely better than something I could come up with. Keep up the good work!