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Everything is okay, just as mundane,
There is nothing to fear — fear the avant-garde,
There is a limo waiting outside for you,
Run, they are the ones I warned you about,
Take the cab, take your pills, the thrill you feel is dangerous,
Numb away your doubts, everything in its right place.
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You're pulling away from me, it will only get you hurt,
Your heart is throbbing, stop it, you spoiled child!
Keep your head down, they are following you,
But I will protect you and make everything normal again,
I will sing you the song, the one I sing to everyone else,
But since you are special, I will shuffle around the key words.
3
Disorder is what they bring, they will tell that you mean nothing,
That your existence is a fluke, what a blatant lie!
Never let someone tell you who you are — you are special, remember,
That means you can choose your own mundane path, no restrictions,
We are losing them — that's it!
Believe every word I say and you will always be safe.
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Hello! Here to review your poems!
. Also, it adds a more emotional aspect. I can tell all the feelings of the narrator!
I'm impressed by the fact that you wrote this from an album! That is super cool! I also enjoy that there are 3 different parts, however, I don't know if they are connected? They seem as if they could be, and also aren't. So that maybe just a little confusing, but I like it, so you don't have to change it if that's how you like it.
With the format, I actually like it. I know that's not as normal for a poem, but it's a different feel. It makes the poem seem like if a poem and a story had a baby
Just one thing I am a little confused about is this line-
"There is nothing to fear — fear the avant-garde"
It is a little confusing, but I think after rereading I get a little better feel of what it means. However, I am still iffy because it just doesn't fit I guess. Other than that these, or this poem is really good! I will be reading more of your work! Great job again!
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Thank you!
I love it!
Hey there MehraZulAzim! I am here for a review.
Review: In 1, I don't understand what you mean by this: There is nothing to fear-fear the avant-grade.
Can you clear it up? So readers can understand.
And I think you don't need - in few lines.
After comma please go to next line and write. It's too crowded. That isn't how poem should be and what readers should feel.
Just my curiosity taking over. What is that 1,2 and 3 before another stanza and after one is finished?
Is there any reason you wrote this peom?
No offense in all the things.
Enjoyed reading.
Keep on writing!
>Chris Dixon
Thanks for the review.
"There is nothing to fear-fear the avant-grade."
The speaker, who's meant to be this manipulative entity, makes a bunch of self-contradicting statements in the poem. It's one of them.
And as I said in the description, the poem was induced by the mood and ambience that Radiohead's album 'Kid A' has.
Love this!
I like all the word choices and writing style. I like how it's divided into pairs of lines. You have managed to say everything you wanted to in a short text.
All in all a very well written poem.
I really like this poem. It's definitely better than something I could come up with. Keep up the good work!