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by Meghaji


When the person takes different path for success...

People call him 'diverted'

It's their mistake if they can't understand the path...


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Sun Feb 24, 2019 3:24 am
Dossereana wrote a review...



Hi @Meghaji I am here to do a review on you poem.

Things that I think need work

Okay so I joge a poem on how long it is, I can see that this poem is three lines long, I would say that maybe two more lines would have worked a bit better for this poem.

What needs a little ficksing

When the person takes different path for success...
okay I don't really get why the full stops are there, I don't really think that you need them there.

It's their mistake if they can't understand the path...
more full stops this time at the end though, so maybe you did need those ones there. any ways I just feel like this needs more to it.
but I do think you did a good job of the lines that you have don't get me wrong about that, this is really good I think for just though's lines, I hop you get more likes on this soon.

So that is all that I can say, If I came across as being to harsh on you then I am really sorry pleas for give me for it, So keep up the grate poem writing, I hop to read more.

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Sat Feb 23, 2019 12:24 am
secretrose29 says...



I hope to see more of your writing soon!




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secretrose29 wrote a review...



This is really true Meghaji! I believe that there are many ways to become successful, it kind of works in the same way as when you are traveling on the road to reach a destination. There are many alternative routes we can take, but it depends on which one works best for us.

The only thing I would ask you to improve on would be the first line: there’s a slight grammatical error. It’s supposed to be: When the person takes a different path for success.

Good job, keep it up!


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Meghaji says...


Thank you so much for ur review......I will surely work on it.!!!!




Patience is the strength of the weak, impatience is the weakness of the strong.
— Immanuel Kant, Philosopher