Thank you everyone for your feedback.
It seems that I have a few rhythm issues and yes, some of the rhyming words are a bit forced.
I do know that poetry doesn't have to rhyme but I feel it makes it a bit more interesting. I guess I will just have to practice a little more.
And it has to start with Wednesday afternoon because I wrote this when I lost a pet and it happened on Wednesday afternoon at five to four. That is why it is so specific.
Thanks again and I will improve it before I hand it in
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