okay i'm kinda new at this soo here goes...
"Edddd!" i scrambled out of the room screaming, he did it again. Again!
Ed scrambled down the hall giggling like a little school girl, in his hand he held a wet towel,just sopping with water.
"Ed you know i cant stand water!!"i sighed being a chimera wasnt always fun especially when you bunk with a short blond with a thing against cats."yo shorty it'll take ages to dry my ears off, you better cime help!"
"Who did you call Extra small super pipsqueak?!"his face was red and scrunched together in his 'angry' look.
"You, now come help me!"
k it's not done yet but this is short notice 
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,018 Literary Works • 672,861 Reviews
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
OKay...so this is an interesting piece here. Judging by the author's note here, it looks like this one's a bit incomplete, so that's probably the reason why, but it is really quite hard to tell what this meant to be here. This doesn't really have the feel of a prologue or anything of that sort, this reads like a really fun little scene from maybe the first chapter or even just a bit of an excerpt cause this is pretty much just a neat little scene here. There is essentially nothing going on in terms of introduction besides a few subtle hints at this person perhaps not being a human.
Overall, there really isn't much that happens here to comment on, but, as far as this scene, I think you manage to create a really wholesome sounding exchange of dialogue there. Its very clear that these two characters are friends and probably pretty good friends with one person playing a bit of a prank on the other. There's also nice subtle hints at more mysterious aspects. Overall, for something as short as this one, it makes for a surprisingly satisfying read that makes you want to find out more here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Capitalize your I's always, like megsug wrote it will help people gain respect for you and your writings. Also, why did you post it if it wasn't done? There was no rush, and it looks kinda stupid. No offense. It was good but what the heck is a chimera? I think the reader might like more of the following....
1. description
2. length
3. description
4. grammar edits
5. spelling edits.
There may have been more but on to the good stuff. It was good but like I said before, really really short. Make it longer! PM me when you do! I'll still be here! Haha, lots of love!
Jenn
Hey,
Okay, I have no idea what chimera chick is, but I'd thought I'd help you out.
For one, bad grammar is a pet peeve of many people here. Try to capitalize all of your I's. Even when your not posting a work, people like good grammar, especially if it's obvious grammatical rules that kindergardeners know, and no text talk or speak or whatever (I don't use it enough to know what it's called.) This is a writing website after all.
Okay, I hope this helps, and that you have a good YWS experience. If you need a review, just tell me, and I'll read whatever you need.
Megsug