Young Writers Society

Hello there,

I liked this because:

It had amazing language which really made you want to drink coffee at this very moment, it also described the exact view that a coffee addict would have about their favorite drink. It also used complex description and I enjoyed reading the whole thing because it puts a new angle on coffee. It also worked well as an ode. Not mentioning the flow in this, the stanza's were all the same length and it was very accurately set out which I found really pleasing.

I didn't like this because:

I personally don't really like coffee at all which is obviously just me being who I am but aside from that I wasn't very keen on the length because it was far too long in my opinion and toward the end some people start to just skim through it rather than reading it. I also didn't understand how the last line really related to the poem and I think it was just a little unnecessary. There was also a few grammar mistakes but nothing too serious, they were all just minor.

Overall I did really like this and I hope to see more of your writing around. Keep using the great description and language it was very effective and definitely impacted this poem.

From Cute Jack Russell

Hi! From one fellow coffee addict to another, I loved this poem. You've put how great coffee really is for the world to see in an excellently-worded and pretty much gramatically perfect nutshell. So, as you can tell, I really liked reading this. I love espresso. Ok, random comment. What's your favorite! XD??? Leave me a comment if you like. *Like* from me!
~ Amelia:)

Hello Matthews!

Nice to meetcha! You've practically summed up my existence in this poem. Nicely done. I've been drinking coffee since I was a wee tot. My grandmother used to mix it with milk and put it in my bottle. I kid you not. It was the only way I'd drink milk. Anywho, I liked this. I'm going to be honest and say I kinda stopped reading it after the fourth stanza, because I haven't had the requisite amount of coffee today that would enable me to keep my attention focused on one thing, but what I did read, I found delightfully playful. Good job of capturing the essence of java. You've done coffee addicts across the world proud.

Happy Writing!
Baywolf

I HATE COFFEE.

...but the poem was epic, and quite dramatic. I loved it. XD I was saying to my fellow classmates, "This person like coffee too much."
Besides tasting nasty, coffee puts me to sleep. :V

Um, I think I love this.

The very thought of a brew turns my head to the clouds in haste,

A drop, a drip, no, I can’t let a single black pearl go to waste.

I often live off you alone, you I’d never dream of deserting.

My, my are you flirting?

when I hear your cheerful gurgle, your happy splash ring.