Hey there! Scarlet here, as you know It's review day.
You know what that means, time to review!
Nitpicks first...
- Your sentence structure is fine but I'd suggest separating the lines so It's easier to read.
That's it, surprisingly there are to grammar or punctuation issues.
You did a brilliant job, but unfortunately I wasn't really entertained. It doesn't really give a message to me, or I just don't understand the message.
I'd suggest you making some room after the poem, to write what exactly the message is in the poem.
That's only a request, but I hope you take It to thought.
Good job and keep writing!
Sincerely, Scarlet; Member of #0000BF ">Team Aqua!
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