Hello.
So the concept of show and tell is not given here in the childish classroom sense of taking things in to explain them. I think this is written on a very sexual level?
If I show you my weapon,
perhaps you can show yours too.
You've got a look in your eyes,
that speak to me, "I want you".
You tease me with you laughter-
I'd hate to see you leave me.
I know that we are in love,
that you'll never decieve me.
The whole "weapon" image is a bit cliche, but this is a lot about temptation, so I will accept that you are talking in this way. The reported speech is typical of you; and it does sound almost colloquial. The teasing and the hate or all classic examples of the topic about which you're writing.
If I give you an idea,
will you come to mine tonight?
Try hard to keep your clothes on.
If not, we will see those sights.
Sights of beauty, sex, passion.
That will remain in my mind.
Don't have to picture you, babe.
You're never too hard to find.
The narrator in this poem is very creepy and attempting to be seductive and just... ewww. He is trying to seduce god knows how many people by showing them parts of his body.
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All this beauty and sex stuff is very shallow and conceited in this example. XD Just yack... this person is a perv.
Let's do it.
Do it. Do it.
Do it.
Let's hope the parents don't know.
Show & tell
Prove my love
Show & tell
Natural stuff
Trying pass off being sexually exploited as natural is a bit... wrong. :/ I don't know whether the views of the narrator hold true to that of the author, but I would have given this work a ranking when submitting it.
Like 16 or something? Anyways... Keep writing.
~R
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