Hello.
I have to say I don't understand the meaning or the significance of the title of this work.
Strangely, it was that very thing that drew me to reading it XD That and the fact you'd written it.
So...
I cross the road in hope
That I'll be noticed by you
I will do whatever
To have you in my grasp
Even if it does mean
That I will end up staring
Nothing left to do now
Except think of your ass
I like the first line, it's really hopeful and dainty. The start of this is very romantic in itself.
It's about love and sacrifice and also commitment I think.
Oh.
Wait. except think of your ass? Hmm. Maybe not so romantic. XD LOL Actually, it did make me life and I kinda like the audacity of the narrator. So... -thumbs up-
(So please know!) So please know I think of you
In all situations and in all rooms
I think you're sexy and I love you so
You make my broken half whole
Hmm, this stanza suggests something more of desperation, the narrator is trying to be noticed by this other person. At all costs. I'm confused by the last line of this stanza though. What does it mean? XD
My penis has become
A pink flag of surrender
Endless stroking at night
Has left me paralysed
It's making me nervous
I hate to be a bother
But you should read the mail
I wait for your reply
Awwww. This is actually sweet. It doesn't have the same pervy tones as some of the others works of yours I have read. In fact, I admire the "character" here for being honest and forthcoming with such personal information. It's charming.
Your eyes are the same shape
Of my favourite body part
You have the curves and shape
To make me go insane
It's not masturbating
I just make love to your mind
I wish you'd never see
Me as something innane
i technical point, I wouldn't have repeated "shape" so quickly after using it in the first line but it doesn't detract from the overall meaning.
"I just make love to your mind."
There's something captivating about you when you write about sex in this way.
Brilliant.
Well done.
♥
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