Hey Marz! June here!
(You've attacked the poetry forums lately, I see )
One of the hardest things about people requesting reviews is reviewing the piece and not finding anything worthwhile or valuable to say. *grumbles*
Let's see:
This was pretty much beautiful. The rhyme here was done well, very smooth and fluent and not at all seeming forced.
I love your rhyme scheme here Mars. It's amazingly well done, the 1, 2, 1 -- 2, 3, 2, -- 3, 4, 3 and so on really does wonders here. It's beautiful.
Not to mention the theme is brilliant; the bitter revenge this character has sought has a slight hint of regret to it. Amazingly done, Mars.
(In the future, unless you want me to babble on and on endlessly about your amazingness, give me something with flawz, kthnxbai.)
Brilliant job here, dearie! Good luck in that contest. =]
June
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