Published October 25, 2011
Those who hear the call
deep in your chest,
Come with us all
and be blessed.
In the forest's night
Merry meet,
Following the moon's light
we greet.
All shall walk together
hand in hand,
Protected by sacred heather
united we stand.
When the time arrives
Merry part,
A piece of our lives
stays in the heart.
Scattered into the directions
by the wind,
Our souls' connections
linked and pinned.
Don't take on sorrow
and any bane,
We'll see all tomorrow
merry meet again.
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oh! Thanks you guys
this is the blessing that my Book of Shadows will have.
It not only represents the leaving from someone's life, but I also wanted it to represent the cycle of life death and rebirth.
I'll post my protection chant when I write it down
Hi Maki-Chan!
This poem is the most wonderful and touching I've read. :')
No mistakes, no punctuation corrections, no rhythms off...
It's just perfect!
Must publish! :O
Cheers,
Cookie
I agree with everyone else, this is a great poem. Anyone could learn for this poem, the tone was just perfect I felt really attached with this poem. Great Job, your an awesome writer. Keep the writing up.
This is real good i loved the ryhthym and seriousness of the poem. I could see this as being one of our nations poems that a president might read at his innaguration. Really good man you got talent!!! Im hoping you keep writing and posting cause' this is some good stuff. You've got the makings of a great writer keep it up! Awesome
i like your poem. it was very good. i think that how you made the lines ryme was very good. and that you do need to keep writing. i like the name also. it gets to to point in your poem. some names dont even relate.