Published March 21, 2007
For Sophie
Every time I look at you
My heart skips a beat.
The emotions I feel when
I look into your chocolate
Brown eyes confuse me
Beyond belief. The dark
Holes that are your pupils
Hypnotise me still. They have
Every time since I met you yet
It still gives me a thrill. I
Love the way your eyes widen
When you get excited. I love
The way your eyes scrunch up
When you laugh that adictive
Laugh, or smile that beautiful
smile. You make me feel weak
At the knees and probably always
Will.
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That is so sweet. I know how it feels and can relate to your writing. That is good poem, and it does make me all mushy inside. LOL....Well keep up the good work. I've written a few poems but I cant anymore because all my old ones are about dark and depressing things. Now I can't write anymore cuz' thats not me . Oh well. Good Job..Keep it up!!
It was supposed to make people feel all mushy inside. I know it could have been laid out better but that is the second poem I have ever written so I am still kind of experimenting and looking for good styles for layouts.
Thanks for the comment.
-Magyk
Awwwwwwwwwww!!!
That made me feel all mushy inside. (I hope that's what it was intended to do...)
It was very emotive, my only crit is that it could probably be set out better, but other than that it was very good.
Alainna
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