hey!
your poem is not bad at all! it's short and sweet poem. very mellifluous, rhythm is fair.....but i know you will improve. the way you have introduced your stuff in this poem is brilliant and you really deserve good comments on this. but where you should really need to work is your length....you should describe little more about your journey and walk......few more lines will make this poem exceptionally good. i hope you will know all this.
overall great attempt......and very nice poem.
good job! keep writing!
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