Voices

all the other reviews pretty much summed up everything i thought of when i read this poem,Matt i never really knew what your poems was like until now,and you can write some awesome poems.

And @ForeverInsaneee
fix your hair,make sure it is perfect,i dunno but when i read that part,i just felt like it meant fix your self make sure you show goodness,or like, put a smile on the outside even though you arn't smiling on the inside.
thats jsut how i thought of it..

But like i said Maddpoet you can write,use your writing,i hope it can get you farther in your life

~Hope42

I feel like the 1st line and the 3rd line are a bit contradicting, basically you look too fake but you have to look perfect. But it also shows how a lot of people are exactly like that, they want you to be perfect but not fake. The subject matter was really good. I always like a lot of detail in poetry and this one has some but you should try to add a bit more to each stanza. Especially with the switch from what they say to how the narrator has won, add some detail about what the narrator has done to win against them.

Hi there my friend! It's BlimeyLimey217 here for a quick review!

First of all..... Wow! I clicked on this poem expecting something kind of like this, yet different! I read it and was enthralling! I loved the subject! It's something I can relate to easily! Nice work!

Secondly, the rhythm was superb! Even without rhyming there was a steady flow! I know that is difficult to achieve, so awesome!

Thirdly, I didn't notice any grammatical or spelling issues which are common problems in poetry.

Nice work! I look forward to reading more of your works in the near future! Keep up the amazing work!

Your friend,
~Blimey

Fix your smile it looks too fake
{I feel this line was directed to people who put on a mask to hide their true feelings}
Hide your scars they tell too much
{I thought about my best friend, Gabby, who tries to hide the scars she puts on her body}
Fix your hair, make sure it's perfect
Talk little so they won't find out the truth
{I don't understand the line about the hair, but the line afterwards makes me think of how little we actually know people}

I quoted the first stanza and added my direct thoughts as I was reading to show you that I enjoy how this poem has a strong affect on the reader. It made me really think about the people I hang around and what I don't know about them vs. what they know about me. Line 3 kind of threw off a little bit but I loved the poem. From the title, you could never guess it had such a deeper meaning.

This was simply amazing, poet! It has a lot of meaning to it, a lot of truth. Defiantly hits home, something that I can relate to. That's what good poets and writers do. Make something relatable. great job, look forward to seeing you around!

Wow, when I first clicked on this poem I wasn't quite sure what I was going to get. However you went in a completely different direction than I would have thought and I am very thankful for it. You have summarized my high school career (and life to be perfectly honest). Everyone telling you who you're supposed to be and where you're supposed to go and what you're supposed to do and when.

This poem ends kind of sad to me because the speaker gives into the voices, telling then what to do. But it was written very well and there's really not much I can say. The only thing I really have a problem with is flow, because you have a period after every line it's a bit halting. I don't know if that's what you were going for or not but to me it ruins the overall effect of the poem since I'm seeing this poem more as an inner dialogue than anything else. But as I said before good job, this is a very good poem.

PS Welcome to YWS! hope you have tons of fun here.