Young Writers Society

Hi there Bolshevik. Lavvi in to review for you today.

Nice formation of the poem. Must have taken a bit, eh?

I really thought this was a good concept and you executed it extremely well. However, near the end of the sort-of inverted triangle, you had "0"at the end. I don't really think that was needed and it feels like you just added it there... =/

Interesting, though, having it about death. And the title suits well.

Yours,
Lavvi

I love the form of this! It really looks amazing. that was the first thing that caught my eye here.

I get where you were going with this, and I like the presentation of your poem overall. Aplause to you!


Keep Writing!

Kay

Hi! Aww...poor you, no reviews! Never fear...OK, so, yes this looked 'real cool'. I had no idea what you were going on about, quite frankly. I guess it's just one of those uninterpretable pieces of modern poetry. I really don't have anything else to say. Good effort on presentation...
If you're willing to explain further, PM me...I'll gladly listen!
~ Amelia

Looks real cool.