okay feel free to laugh, my first poem I'm gonna post on here
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So I found a new thing Michael
Some one who aren’t you
I found a younger guy
Sexier guy
With songs I understand
It feels to me
He sings my emotions out
I used to say
There aint no other
But you, Michael
You were the only one
Who was in my dreams
Now he’s there too
But Michael listen
I would never, ever
Forget you
Or what you did
In my life
What you meant
You saved my life
You healed my heart
Made me able to love
This other guy
Lives far away
Like you
He’s famous
So are you
He’s never met me
Just like you
When I think about it
Michael, I’m still your fan
I’m still here
My heart is big enough
For both you and him
Is this… cheating
As it’s only crushes
As they call it
Can it be cheating
A fan of yours
Told me, or yelled
That I was a slut
For loving him too
He said to me
I was giving up on you
How could I
Because of you
I have a BIG heart
With space enough
For more than one
He inspires me
To write poems
Novels
His music does that
As I can relate
To the dark songs
Coming from him
But Michael it’s you
Who bring the smile
To my lips
With your songs
His songs can make me cry
So can yours
Yet in a way
I feel deep inside
He understands my feelings
In a way you never could
Maybe I’m all wrong
Just a blind, crazed fan
Maybe I am…
Michael, I love you too
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It's interesting, but kind of confusing. It makes a little more sense as you read further, though.
I like it. It's got a powerful voice, and is about an interesting topic. You should proofread it a few more times, though - I noticed a few errors in the first two stanzas. Maybe you should think about condensing it, though I wouldn't want it to lose its voice. It's very long. Try out a few ways of making it shorter, see if any of them improve upon it. This is good - keep it up!
It's ok. But what are you talking about??? Are you dating this Michael or is it just a crush. you dont; make any sense about what you're talking about. Good, this other guy inspires you. But are they just crushes or are you dating them both?