This is an idea that came to me while sitting in a very draining health class. Tell me what you think and comment please!
I would really like to know if this is good enough to be continued.
" She's beautiful," Nyx cooed holding her new baby girl gently in her arms.
" Yeah, she is," Liverend whispered, conjuring up a mini tornado to ruffle his little girl's hair. She giggled and swatted at the air playfully, the pointy tips of her finger nails slashing at nothing. The abnormal fox ears that sat on the top of her head twitched a bit before perking up right. She had long black hair. Hair so black it reflected purple and gold streaks when it caught the light, just like her mothers did.
" Ah, Nyx, we did well for our first try," Liverend laughed nudging his wife and shifting the mini tornado into a small ball of water. The little girl's eyes opened wide as she starred at the strange ball of liquid floating in front of her face. Her eyes were light grey with little flecks of green and blue. She leaned forward and opened her mouth wide, showing two little pointy teeth, then bit at the ball, getting a face full of water in result.She sneezed and laughed afterwards, clapping her hands together in sharp quick movements.
" Are you suggesting we are going to be trying again," Nyx teased, bumping her hip into Live's.
" Maybe, maybe not. Only I know." They both laughed, then the room was quiet.
" What should we name her," Nyx asked before cooing at the baby once again.
" I don't know," Live replied, scratching his chin in the process," You name her."
There was a tense silence. Nyx scanned the room. The walls were painted a deep purple and the dark hardwood floor was covered with a soft grey carpet. A shiny, gold lined, rocking chair sat in the corner accompanied by a plush rabbit with snow white fur and big, black, shiny, marble eyes. Next to it was a side table with a lamp and a copy of "Kissing Coffins" sprawled open on top of it. There was a mahogany coffee table in the center of the room with a big flat screen t.v mounted on the wall in front of it. A black sofa and love seat sat behind the table, each paired with a smaller table that help either a vase or a lamp.
" I'll name her," she paused, smoothing her hair back from her face, showing her vivid, emerald green eyes",Nanali," she nodded," Nanali." Liverend nodded too, his dark brown hair bouncing over his head in loose curls, his sea blue eyes fixed on his daughter.
" I wonder where she got those grey eyes," he chuckled," Not from me, I'm sure."
"Neither from I," Nyx laughed while she conjured up darkness to suspend Nanali in the air. Live's breath caught in his throat.
" Careful, love," he whispered frantically," Don't let her slip through!" Nanali's tail matched her ears, and now, it flicked swiftly back and forth.
" Now, Live, when have you ever known me to be uncareful, hmm?" Live wiped away a thin sheet of sweat that was forming on his brow.
" Yes, sorry, I'm just a bit nervous. She is out first child," He sighed," She posses animals." Nyx smiled.
" Nanali, goddess of animals," she turned to her husband, willing the darkness that held Nanali to push her into her father's arms," rolls off the tongue doesn't it?"
" It does," he whispered as he looked down at the small bundle of warmth that filled his arms. He took in her chubby round face, pink cheeks, wide eyes, and silky hair," Yep, it sure does."
The front door was suddenly thrown open, a blast of fire hit Nyx, catching her off guard, and threw her into the coffee table. Hundreds of rushed voices stormed into the room, all screaming the same thing over and over again.
"The baby! Make sure you get the baby!"
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Yeah, sorry.
I type 'out' why I try to put 'our' lots of times. It's a problem I have.
Hi there!
I really like this! The elements added to it along with darkness and animals! I love all that stuff!
Few things though:
I saw this twice and I believe you mean "our"?
Other than that I think you did a spectacular job! I really liked this! I definatly think its worth continuing!
Hope too see more my friend
Keep up the awesome work!
-Irish