An Ode to American Idol

I liked the poem itself.. the subject not so much. I was once the biggest American Idol fan to be found anywhere. But the show has changed so much over the years.. First Paula left, then Simon... And the people who get through... some of them just don't deserve to. But, back to your piece. It feels like more of a story, which is nice in a way, I don't know I thought it was cute. You did a good job. Keep writing!

God Bless,
Amber.

This is a cute and lightly funny poem. I like the ending. "The rooms filled with laughter and smiles and glee/ good thing next year the winner will be me." I thought this was pretty funny. I like the vocabulary you used, it made the poem really glow with happiness and magic. The poem emphasizes the phrase "Dreams do come true." For example,

"Every one cheers as you sing on the stage
you're astonished you got here from minimum wage.
It's all so big, so blue, and so grand,
and everyone sings along with that band."

I like this for the vocabulary you used. This is also an example of the poem emphasizing the phrase "Dreams do come true." Although, I notice you wrote "Every one." I think you should change that to Everyone.

Also, in the line, "Randy agrees that you're pretty 'Tight.'", you wrote "Tight." I think you should change that to "tight."

"One by one (a comma here) you(r) new friends go home
but now there are two (a comma here) you're not yet alone
Ryan looks at the name in (his) hands
and as he tells you (put a comma here) you've won the audiance (change to audience) stands."

The comments I put in parentheses are just what I think you should do. You don't have to do what I say I think you should do. These are just suggestions. Although, overall, like I said, the poem is cute and lightly funny. Keep writing poetry because I think you'll get better with practice and with people's comments and suggestions!

I would have to say this poem was not that great. First, because of the title. American Idol is a joke, the voting is rigged somehow because the best singers never win, and second because the flow of the poem seemed off to me. Punctuation and word choice diminished the quality. For example:

The audition room where dreams come true
#FF0000 ">tears may fall but not from you. #000000 ">[color=#000000]This should be a separate sentence. The flow makes it a run-on. Bad.[/color]
You stand with the judges,#FF0000 "> that royal court,
and pray that your voice does not fall short.

and everyone is, #FF0000 ">simply, beaming with pride.

One by one you new friends go home
but now there are two #FF0000 ">you're not yet alone

That is one of the best poems I have ever read!!!

Keep it up you ere very telented. You should be a famous writer. Who does'nt like you!!!

-Pixie2
Ps. I mean what I wrote you are awsome!