Published March 12, 2005
Hi guys. I'm new here. I relocated from TYWC which seems to be a wasteland. I learnt about haikus and became intrigued so I tried my hand at some. Tell me what you think - Lou
SAVAGENESS
Within savageness,
Nature of fierceness and hate,
Lies the aesthetic.
SPRING
Bright yellow and gold,
Amidst the splendor of green,
Sweet flowers of spring.
TIME
The stillness at night,
Gives way to morning's delight
The passage of time.
TREES
The gods' masterpiece,
Engulfs the world with green,
The wonder in trees.
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Um . . . isn't haiku plural just "haiku?" Just a thought . . .
Yes they are pretty, and I liked them, and your last haiku has six syllables.
mas_wink: 
mas_happy: 
mas_cool: 
mas_evil: :dreidel: :menorah: :frosty: :thumb: =D> #-o =P~ :^o [-X [-o< 8-[ [-( :-k ](*,) :whistle: O:) =; :sick: 
{|= :-$ :-s \:D/ :-# :hearts_eyes: :love: :lots_hearts:
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All so pretty! wow really pretty Haikus...I can only find one fault with them and it's so pendantic sorry but in
TREES
The gods' masterpiece,
Engulfs the world with green,
The wonder in trees.
This haiku the second line had six rather then seven syllubles. I think it was my least favourite also. but the others all very very good. impressive.