"Double Dad"--- Chapter 6

by Loose

Published June 3, 2007

In Another folder

An even shorter chapter XD

CHAPTER 6 THE NOTE

I'm sorry for running away, but it's something I had to do. I can't be in Melbourne, I can't go to the funeral, I can't be around family and I can't pretend anymore. Don't bother trying to find me. I don't want to be found. Just give me time. And could you pick some lavender and put it on Mums coffin for me? Please? She loved lavender.

Corrie

Sorry about the length. I would've posted chapter 7 along with chapter 6 but chapter 7 is saved on my dad's computer and I got impatient.

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Alteran
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Alteran commented Comment · Jun 4, 2007

:(

Poor Corrie. So sad....You did a great job. Totally got across the emotion in a short amount of space.

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JC
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JC commented Comment · Jun 4, 2007

Short. Sweet. And to the point. It was sad.

...that's about it for me...

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miyaviloves
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miyaviloves wrote a review Review · Jun 3, 2007

Yeah like everrryone had said verrrry short, but I'm sure you can join some of the chapters together when you have written more and stuff.
As for this piece, it was sweet, but sad.
But like Alianna said, it's very hard to give a crit to something so small, as you can't really get into any real depth.

All the best,
Meevs
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Black Ghost
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Black Ghost commented Comment · Jun 3, 2007

Yes, short, but conveyed good emotion. Good Overall.

-Tony

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Alainna
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Alainna commented Comment · Jun 3, 2007

This was indeed extremely short! I did like it though.

I like the detail about Lavender.

Please try and post more in one go, as it's hard to crit like this.

Good stuff,
Keep it up,
Alainna
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chocoholic
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chocoholic commented Comment · Jun 3, 2007

Definetly short, but I liked it. This chapter was straight to the point, but had enough emotion in it to make you feel sorry for the girl. Update soon!



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