Hello, Lonelymountain!!
This is Eros here to review your sweety poem!!
Hmm... so, let us begin with the very first thing that matters the most. That's the TITLE of the work. The title is very good and is up to the mark. Its length is also appropriate. I liked that.
Now, coming to the STYLE OF WRITING. The way you have written the poem is really fascinating. The style of writing is fluent and easy to understand. The style of writing is unique too. I loved this.
Then, the next ting is the WORDS USED. The words usd to describe the things are very well. But still, there is a scope for improving the matter. My suggestin is to use adverbs. They help in making a good effect and helps in creating a very good impact on the reader.
Then, the next thing which should be discussed is the THEME of the poem. The theme is really very simple, and unique. I liked the way you have described the simpl theme in such a beautiful and creative way. It is really very good art to say so much in a very few words, like you have said so mny things in such a few words.
Rest, everything is great! You have done a beautiful work. I appriciate this piece. It's uniqueness, it's style of writing, it's title and everything impresses me the most. But, you should take care of using the adverbs ad adjectived ti describe them more effectively.
Overall, the poem is best!
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