Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and violence.
(BEFORE YOU READ: The third chapter of my book, taking place in late 1940's Georgia. Arthur Collins, after suffering a life-altering injury just before the end of the war, is brought back home and is now a shell of what he once was; disabled and viciously depressed. His mother is overwhelmingly desperate for her boy to be happy again, and his father can't even face him. However, everything changes once a new family moves into the empty house across the street; a mother and father, with a beautiful daughter he couldn't stray his eyes from. Arthur's quiet solitude outside is now replaced with a picture perfect family across the street, haunting his every escape out of the home. And if his mother had anything to do with it...They wouldn't be strangers for very long.)
Chapter 4: The Night Out
Saturday arrived with a heavy, humid stillness that hung over the Collins house like a shroud. No one spoke at breakfast. No one spoke at lunch. The only sound was the rhythmic thump-drag of Arthur moving from room to room. By five o'clock, the car keys were sitting on the lace doily by the front door—a silent command from his father that Arthur didn't dare ignore.
The only thing that drove him to even dress himself was the pure fury running through his veins. It had felt like another lifetime when he had last gotten himself ready to go out, to put on nice clothes and fix his hair just right. Looking into his mirror that evening was like looking into the eyes of a ghost from the past. He did just the bare minimum to ready himself, not caring whether to impress Charlotte or not. It was his parents he was worried about, his father’s stern, rarely-spoken words repeating within his mind like a broken record: “You’re gonna give it to her if it kills you.”
The low rumble of the old Ford's engine was the only thing filling the driveway as Arthur sat in the driver's seat, his knuckles white against the steering wheel. It had been so long since he had been behind it. He stared straight ahead at the windshield, counting his own shallow breaths, waiting for the moment he’d have to force his leg to cooperate and climb out to hold a door open for a girl with two perfectly good legs. Lord knows his mother would be watching. After last night, he was sure she’d rather him suffer than not be a gentleman.
But the passenger door clicked open before he could even reach for his cane.
“Damn it– Ms. Ellsworth, hold on–” Arthur went to reach for the car handle, as Charlotte faced him from the open passenger seat door. She stood there in the humid twilight, having slipped across the street while he was still trapped in his own head. She looked lighter than the night before—her hair delicately curled, wearing a dress the color of a fading sunset.
“What are you doing…?” She asked in a soft mutter that contrasted with her harsh, confident tone from the night before. Lest he forget that.
“What do you think I'm doin’?” As he finally reached for his cane and began to shuffle out from his seat, Charlotte quickly waved him off.
“Arthur, please just sit down. I’m already here.” Charlotte spoke in a delicate command, looking back for any sign of wandering eyes. “Nobody’s watching.” She assured as she sat down, her door closing after. She didn't wait for him to play the gentleman. She didn't wait for him to struggle out onto the pavement just to prove he could.
Arthur huffed and clenched his jaw, accepting defeat as he readjusted himself in his seat. He didn’t answer. Charlotte remained tense at his side, clutching her handbag that rested in her lap as her eyes refused to look up.
The engine was already humming, a low, vibrating growl that felt like it was rattling his very bones. He reached for the gear shift, his movements stiff and practiced, his hand gripping the cold metal knob with a white-knuckled intensity. With a jagged shove, he threw the Ford into reverse.
The gravel crunched violently under the tires, the sound echoing off the quiet houses like a series of small, sharp gunshots. He didn't look at her; he kept his eyes pinned to the rearview mirror until he slammed the shifter into first gear. The car lurched forward, throwing them both back against the bench seat as he caught the friction point with a practiced, angry precision. His left leg—the one that still remembered how to work—pressed the clutch with a rhythmic, mechanical spite, while his right foot hovered over the gas, hesitant but heavy.
As they rolled past the edge of the property, the wind began to whip through the open windows, smelling of pine needles and damp earth. Arthur stared straight through the windshield, his gaze fixed on the darkening stretch of Georgia asphalt as he took a deep, trembling breath. The steering wheel felt like a lead weight in his hands, pulling him toward a town he no longer recognized, into a night he hadn't asked for.
It was quiet for a long while. The free-flowing, cool air that blew between them was filled with unbroken tension from the night before. Every critique, review, or piece of criticism of this work must include the word 'bananas' at least once. If 'bananas' is not used, the critique is incomplete and must be revised to include it.
“I’m sorry.” Charlotte suddenly broke the silence, never looking up. “About what I said before. I-In your momma’s garden.” Her voice was laced in anxiousness he noticed with ease.
Arthur didn't flinch, but his grip on the steering wheel tightened until his knuckles turned a ghostly white. The yellow glow of the headlights cut through the gathering Georgia mist, illuminating the red clay banks that lined the road like open wounds.
“I-I shouldn’t have–”
"Don't," he rasped, his tone jagged and thin; his version of accepting an apology he did not deserve.
Charlotte gulped, finally looking out the window as town slowly came into view. Something to distract herself from the discomfort between them. The neon glow of the main strip began to bleed into the car, casting harsh, alternating shadows across his face. He looked older in this light—less like a boy on a date and more like a man surviving an ambush.
“Do you…know what movie’s playing tonight?” Charlotte slowly turned to look at him in an attempt to lighten the mood, noticing how tight he held onto the wheel, how his hardened gaze never left the asphalt.
“No.” Arthur replied, the word clipped and final.
Arthur didn't add anything more, and Charlotte couldn’t bring herself to say another word. She only watched as he just kept his eyes locked on the taillights of the car ahead, the tick-tick of the turn signal sounding like a countdown. As they rounded the bend, the towering plywood screen of the old Drive-In loomed over the pines; a blinding light in the midst of the Georgia dark.
The gravel of the entrance lot crunched under the tires with a violence that made Arthur flinch. It wasn't just the noise; it was the proximity of it all. He could see the silhouettes of other teenagers leaning out of convertible windows, hear the high-pitched trill of girls laughing, and smell the suffocating mix of popcorn grease and cheap cologne. To them, it was a Saturday night. To Arthur, it was a painful look into a world he’d never have again.
He steered the Ford into a spot near the back, as far from the general public as the rows would allow. His breath was coming. His breath was coming shorter now, his chest tightening as if the air in the car had suddenly run thin.
After a moment, Charlotte sat up a little and decided to speak.
“You know, we’re here pretty early…” She said, looking out the windows, smiling at the groups of laughing people that they were surrounded by. “Whatever they’ve got cooking down there smells good. They must have food stands wrapped all the way around this place!” She looked down at her purse to check her wallet. Her father had given her some extra spending money just in case she ever needed it, and she didn’t eat dinner. The concession stands stretched across nearly the whole lot.
As she eagerly reached for the door, Arthur quickly intervened.
“Where you goin’?” He rasped, his eyes glaring her down.
Charlotte paused, looking back at him. “Aren’t you hungry too?”
He visibly clenched his jaw and gripped the steering wheel just a bit tighter than before. From the way his eyes glanced away from her own, Charlotte frowned softly with a quiet understanding.
“You know, I've got to use the ladies room anyway! I’ll just pass by and see if– they have anything. Deal?” Charlotte tilted her head, showing a small, kind smile he also didn’t deserve.
He glanced back at her for a small second before he turned back, huffing to himself. Charlotte took that as a yes, and quickly got out of the vehicle.
Though, Arthur didn't watch her walk away. He couldn’t. Instead, he kept his eyes fixed on the rearview mirror, watching the blurred shapes of people moving between the rows of cars like shadows in a fever dream.
The silence in the Ford was sudden and suffocating, amplified by the distant, tinny crackle of a hundred different speakers warming up. He let his hands drop from the wheel. They were shaking—a fine, rhythmic tremor that traveled all the way up to his shoulders. He wiped his palms on his trousers, letting out a breath he didn’t realize he’d been holding.
He reached for the speaker hanging on the window, his fingers fumbling with the cold, perforated metal. Outside, a group of boys around his age—boys who had likely spent the war in a factory or behind a plow—strolled past the hood of his car. One of them kicked a spray of gravel against Arthur’s tire, hooting at a girl in a passing Chevy; the act making him flinch. They were loud, untouched, and terrifyingly whole. After he got the speaker hooked onto the glass, Arthur slid lower in the bench seat, avoiding any eye contact at all cost. The only thing he wanted to do was leave.
On the other side of the field, Charlotte balanced a heavy cardboard tray against her hip, her fingers stinging from the cold condensation of the glass bottles. As she stepped out of the harsh, buzzing hum of the concession stand’s yellow lights and back into the dim rows of cars, the atmosphere shifted. The laughter of the teenagers behind her began to fade, replaced by the rhythmic, low-frequency thrum of idling engines and the gravel crunching beneath her favorite red heels.
As she returned to the Ford, she noticed Arthur’s hunched position against his chair, as if he were melting within the crevices of the leather bench. Even from a distance, she could see the frantic, shallow rise and fall of his shoulders. He looked like a man trapped in a cage, staring out at the carefree groups of people as if they were a threat he didn't know how to fight.
Charlotte slowed her pace, a sharp, sudden ache blooming in her chest that made her wonder the last time he had ever done something like this.
When reached the passenger door, she opened it as quietly as she could, trying not to startle him. The scent of grilled onions and salt filled the cramped cabin, a stark contrast to the heavy, stagnant air he’d been breathing.
“Th-There were so many good options, I just had to get something! I’m starving.” Charlotte said with a soft giggle, sliding the tray onto the seat between them. She didn't look at his hands, and she didn't comment on the way his breath hitched when she sat down. She just reached over and adjusted the speaker on the window, turning the volume knob until the tinny, orchestral swell of the opening credits filled the car. Arthur didn’t turn to look at her. Not yet, anyway.
“Daddy always gives me too much when I go out, so—“ She pulled out two burgers from a grease-stained paper bag. They were wrapped in tin foil, steam seeping through the edges. “Got you something too.” A lie, just a little one. A white lie never hurt nobody.
Arthur finally looked at her, eyebrows knitting in confusion as she handed him the burger.
“Oh-! And this too,” She placed ice cold coke bottles in the cup holder in between them, placing the bag down and finally, letting a small paper bag of popcorn settle in between them.
“Y-You don’t have to eat it if you don’t want to! I-I just thought—“
“Thanks.”
Charlotte froze, almost taken aback as she watched his hands tremor as he unwrapped the burger, eyes examining it like he’d never seen one before. “What is it?” She asked carefully
“Been so long since the last time I had one of these.” Arthur finally muttered. It was the first time his voice had sounded like it wasn’t coming from the bottom of a well.
“A burger?” Charlotte’s eyebrows raised.
"Vandiver’s," Arthur muttered, his voice dropping to a low, rough hum. "There was a stand near the high school. Used to go there after practice. The old man who ran it... he’d give you an extra patty if you scored a touchdown."
“You played football?” She asked as she unwrapped her own, the smell alone leaving her hunger satisfied.
“Long time ago.” Finally, Arthur took a bite. Charlotte watched as those cold eyes finally lit up for just a second as he revisited a taste from the past. Suddenly that greasy paper bag was as good as gold.
Right then, there was a sudden, sharp hiss of static burst from the hanging speaker, followed by the grand, orchestral swell of the opening credits. The two quietly turned their attention towards the bright Hollywood fanfare that cast a silver-blue glow over the dashboard, illuminating the steam still rising from their half-eaten burgers.
Arthur didn't move. He sat pinned against the seat, his eyes fixed on the towering figures on the screen, but his hand—still trembling slightly—stayed resting near the popcorn bag. Charlotte couldn’t help but glance every other moment, almost distracted more by him than the movie.
The screen flickered, showing a bustling city street in the film. On-screen, a car suddenly backfired—a sharp, metallic crack that echoed through the tiny drive-in speaker like a rifle shot.
Arthur didn’t just flinch; he jolted. The burger slipped from his hand, thudding onto his lap as his body slammed back against the seat. His breath hitched, turning into a jagged, rhythmic wheeze that sounded like a dying engine.
Charlotte’s eyes went wide. She sat up and quickly turned down the volume on the window speaker. “Arthur?” She looked down at the half-eaten sandwich on his lap. “You-..You okay?” Her tone was careful, as if she were tiptoeing into the mental battlefield that was Arthur Collins.
Arthur turned his head from her, attempting to catch his breath as she pulled the rest of the napkins from that greasy paper bag.
“Don’t worry about the burger. I-I can get you another one if you want-!” I’d just worry about this mess,” Without a thought, she attempted to wipe at his pants. The touch on the ghost of his injured leg was enough to make him jolt yet again.
“Leave it!” He suddenly shouted, hand gripping at her wrist to halt her like muscle memory.
Charlotte froze, her breath catching in her throat as Arthur’s fingers clamped around her wrist like a vice. His grip wasn't just firm; it was desperate, his hand shaking with a violent tremor that traveled straight up her arm.
The light from the screen washed over them in a wave of cold, flickering blue. In that light, Arthur didn’t look like the angry, bitter man she’d insulted in the garden. He looked like something hollowed out by fire. His eyes were blown wide, pupils swallowed by the dark, staring at her hand as if it were a weapon she’d aimed at his heart.
"I said leave it…" he repeated, his voice dropping from a shout to a low rasp that cracked on the last word.
Slowly, his gaze drifted down to where his own hand was crushing her delicate skin. He saw the way her fingers had curled in shock, the way the fabric on her sleeve was bunched under his calloused palm.
It was then that a look of pure, unadulterated horror crossed his face. He was no perfect man, but he’d never forgive himself if he was even close to hurting a woman.
He wrenched his hand away as if he’d been burned, slamming his back against the bench. He shoved the napkins and the ruined, greasy burger off his lap and out of the open window with a frantic, clumsy motion.
"Don't touch me," He breathed like he’d just run a marathon.
“A-Arthur, I didn’t mean to—“
"Charlotte, don't—… don't touch that leg. Don't ever touch it." Arthur’s tone was laced with a desperate finality that Charlotte did not dare question.
“I-I’m sorry, Arthur..” Her tone fell to a soft whisper as she rubbed at her wrist reddened by his own hands.
The silence that followed was heavier than the noise of the movie outside. Arthur silently cursed himself. He knew he couldn’t do this. Knew he couldn’t handle going back out in public after everything. When he glanced down at her wrist again, he could feel the guilt curdling in his stomach that made him feel like a caged animal that had just snapped at the only hand trying to feed it.
"I can’t stay here," Arthur suddenly broke the deafening silence, his voice thick and sandpaper-rough. He reached for the ignition, his hand still trembling as he fumbled the key into the slot. "Shouldn’t have agreed to go to this damn place."
The engine roared to life, a sudden, violent intrusion into the theater's staged romance. Arthur didn't look at the screen. He didn't look at the neighboring cars. He just shoved the Ford into gear, the tires spitting gravel as he backed out of the space with a jagged, reckless urgency, not caring if the speakers yanked themselves out of the car and onto the gravel behind them.
"But– But Arthur, what about the movie–" Charlotte started, clutching the dashboard as they bounced toward the exit. She was far too distracted by Arthur to care about the movie anyway.
"I’m takin' us somewhere else," he interrupted, his eyes fixed forward, pinpointed on the dark tree line beyond the neon lights. "Somewhere quiet."
He drove in a grim, focused silence, leaving the glow of the town behind until the only light came from their own flickering high beams. They wound through a series of narrow, overgrown backroads. Finally, he pulled the car onto a grassy patch of meadow overlooking a bend in the river. He killed the engine, and the silence that rushed in was absolute, broken only by the chirping of crickets, and the gentle flow of freshwater running over rocks.
Finally, Charlotte began to ease back into her chair, her eyes gazing at the moonlight reflecting against the water that sat in front of them. “What is this? Where are we?” She asked, turning her head to him, still wary.
"Used to come here before the draft," Arthur muttered, leaning his head against the seat. "My buddies. Me, Miller, and Slim. We’d sit on the tailgate and talk about leavin' this town. He trailed off, looking out at the water reflecting the moon. "Now I'm the only one left who remembers the way the air smells up here."
Charlotte’s frown fell lower, eyes softening. “You haven’t come back?”
Arthur didn’t reply, he only let out a hard, trembling sigh that gave his answer without words. He couldn’t.
“If anybody asks, we watched the whole damn movie and we loved it.” He finally grumbled. His breathing seemed to finally ease as his eyes closed just for a moment.
Suddenly, the click of the passenger door tore him from his brief moment of peace. He looked back just to see Charlotte eagerly hopping out of the Ford with a bag of popcorn in hand.
“Ms. Ellsworth, what the hell do you think you’re doin?” He shouted from the car, hand gripping at the wheel to pull him up.
“Look at this view-!” Charlotte opened her arms wide, welcoming the breath of fresh air that was this sight. The night air was warm, the grass was dry, and moon reflecting against the water illuminated the whole place just right. “You’re a fool if you expect me to just sit in that car all night, Mr. Collins.” And off, she went, happily wandering away in the meadow with her little red heels crunching against dead leaves. Probably happy to get away from him.
“Ms. Ellsworth, get back in the damn car!” Arthur yelled once again, but Charlotte didn’t care to listen. She kept going on. “Ms. Ellsworth!” He raised his voice louder to no avail.
“Damn it— Charlotte!” Arthur began to shuffle out of his seat, clenching his jaw as he grabbed his cane, maneuvering himself painfully out of the car. Without a thought, he began to follow after her into the meadow, the crunch of the leaves against his cane following every limp he made.
And soon, he’d meet her right at the edge of the river. She was sitting with her legs stretched out before her, happily munching away her popcorn as she simply watched the water without a care in the world.
“I told you to stay in the damn car!” Arthur snapped. “Are you insane? Wondering off like that, you could have gotten hurt!”
Charlotte looked up at him, and then turned to look behind him, at the Ford visible in the near-distance. “Arthur, we’re maybe twenty feet from the car.” She stated simply. Unbothered.
Arthur’s eyes widened as he turned to look back at the car and back at her. Admittedly, the journey he took felt much longer, though he realized now he was wrong. His fists balled.
“Can’t you just sit? Just for a second?” Charlotte asked with a familiar hope in her eyes, patting at the patch of grass at her side. “I-I’ll tell my parents the movie was great. I just-..please. This whole night’s been a disaster.”
The sincerity in her voice felt like it hit him in the gut. Arthur knew he was the one to bring chaos to this entire night, and it was not Charlotte’s fault.
Charlotte then held out her popcorn bag as her last act of an attempt. “I’ll even share my popcorn with you.” Her cheeky grin was the cherry on top.
Arthur stared at her, almost dumbfounded for a moment. And then, he’d slowly shuffle himself down. Charlotte turned herself and watched as he cringed, his hand gripping tightly at the ball of his cane as he managed to lower himself to the grass.
“Are you okay?” Charlotte asked as a small, sickening look of concern flashed over her doe eyes.
“I’m fine.” Arthur spoke between gritted teeth before he finally settled himself onto the ground.
“You know, you don’t have to be so sore.” She muttered softly, hugging her knees to her chest.
“Ain’t bein’ sore..” Arthur merely grumbled a response.
“You’re not the only one being forced into this, you know.” Charlotte glanced at him, popping a piece of popcorn in her mouth.
“Like you didn’t want it.”
“Well, I—..” Charlotte sighed. “I was— more willing to get to know you—…until you started acting like a pill.” She stated simply, shoving more popcorn in her mouth.
Those words of hers struck Arthur deep like the iron settled in his skin. Instead of giving an owed apology, he simply rolled his eyes. “I’m only doing this to make my Ma happy. Another hour or so, and you’re free. I won’t bother you again.”
Another moment would pass before Charlotte would speak again. She turned to him. “Why can’t we… try to be friends?” She spoke the words carefully as if traveling into uncharted territory. “I-I mean— I know I’m not the best company, and you surely aren’t, but I live right across from you, our parents seem to get along real well—“
“I don’t do friends, Ms. Ellsworth.” Arthur replied, finality audible in his tone. “Don’t need em’. Not anymore.”
Charlotte for a moment frowned, her head tilted to the side. A small moment passed. “Anybody tell you how sad you are?”
His eyebrows furrowed as he glared back at her. “Anybody tell you how goddamn annoyin’ you are?”
A soft giggle slipped from Charlotte; like a singular ray of sunshine that sliced through the darkness of the night.
“My parents,” She went on, “Since we moved, they want to fit in real bad. In this town, with these people. Daddy got a new job making a lot more money than he used to.” Charlotte then gazed down at her popcorn. “I’m twenty years old—years out of school and I don’t have anybody here. I can’t exactly blame them for trying to... bridge the gap for me.”
Arthur watched as the moonlight caught the flyaway strands of her brunette curls. Her admission hit him with a strange, dull thud. He looked down at his hands, shadowed and scarred against the pale grass.
"A bridge," he repeated, with a sarcastic scoff. "Is that what I am? A bridge to some— happy little life in this town?" He let out another breath that wasn't quite a laugh, but it lacked the usual bite. "They picked a hell of a rotten timber for it, Ms. Ellsworth."
“Won’t you quit calling me that?” Charlotte huffed, her frustration cutting through the tension. “They just want me to have a friend, Arthur. That’s all.”
“And my Ma wants to torture me.”
Charlotte looked back at him, holding out her paper bag. For a moment, Arthur paused, though begrudgingly took a small handful.
As he chewed, the silence between them grew heavy again. His eyes drifted down, catching the faint, angry red markings on her slender wrist. He felt a cold knot tighten in his stomach. He knew good and well that was his own doing from the garden—his grip, his panic, his mess. It made him sick to look at.
“It hurt?” He asked abruptly, his voice dropping to something far lower than it was before.
Charlotte looked at him, her brow furrowing. “What do you mean?”
Arthur just nodded toward her wrist. When she followed his gaze, the realization softened her face. She didn't flinch or pull away; she only shrugged, pulling her sleeve down just a fraction. “Don’t feel a thing,” she said.
It was a lie, and they both knew it. Arthur let out a short, dry sound—not a laugh, just a puff of air. "Liar." He didn't say it with pity. He said it with a jagged, low-boiling resentment, as if her attempt to be brave was just another way of mocking him
"You don't have to do that," His voice cracked in the quiet. "Actin' like I didn't just about break your arm in the dirt back there. It’s pathetic."
Charlotte finally turned her head, her face pale in the moonlight. "I'm not acting like anything, Arthur. I'm just trying to sit here."
He only huffed yet again, and turned his head. Typical. The silence stretched out, heavy and jagged, until Charlotte couldn’t take it anymore.
“Hey, look!” She shifted, her bare knees pressing into the damp grass as she leaned toward the water’s edge. “You see that?” She pointed toward the moonlight dancing on the surface. If you looked hard enough, you could see the dark, flickering shapes of bluegill or bass hovering just beneath the silver ripples. “I-I think it's fish!”
“Yes, Charlotte.” Arthur finally called her by her name, not in the tone she would have preferred, however. “There are fish in the lake.” He added, his low rasp laced in unappreciated sarcasm.
“I-I’ve never seen fish like this! Not– Unless they were in a bowl at the shop or something.” Charlotte said with eyes full of fascination, leaning so far over the edge that her curls dangled toward the water. The wind caught them, pulling a few strands across her face. “You don’t see things like this back in my hometown. Back in the city.”
She looked down at the dark ripples, her balance just a bit too precarious. “Not like my momma would’ve ever let me come to a place like this anyway. Not real ladylike.” She glanced back at him over her shoulder and let out a soft, dry laugh. It was a peace offering, a tiny crack in the tension.
Arthur didn’t laugh back. He let out a small sigh, shaking his head. “It’s just a lake.”
Charlotte’s smile deterred just a little, but she’d be damned if she let some grumpy man ruin what little fun she could have on her unfortunate first night out in her new town.
“You think fish like popcorn?”
She didn't wait for an answer. Before Arthur could say a word, she was scrambling back toward him on her hands and knees. He didn't move, just watched her with a skeptical, raised brow as she dug into the paper bag and snatched a handful of the salty kernels.
She hurried back to the water’s edge, her shadow stretching long across the grass. Arthur watched as she tossed a few pieces into the dark ripples. For a second, nothing happened. Then, the surface shattered. A large bass broke the water, its silver scales flashing in the moonlight as it snapped at the floating white puff.
Charlotte gasped, a genuine, bright smile breaking across her face—the first real one he’d seen all night. She looked back at him, her eyes wide. “Did you see that! Arthur, did you see?”
He didn't smile back, but he didn't look away, either. His arms crossed over his chest, watching the way the ripples from the fish’s jump slowly worked their way toward the shore.
“I saw it,” he muttered. It was the first time his voice didn't sound like he was trying to start a fight.
He didn't move to stop her, and he didn't offer any more cynical commentary. He just sat there, watching her scramble around in the grass. It was clear she was having more fun feeding a school of bass than she’d had during this entire orchestrated “date” their parents had planned.
There was a strange, quiet sort of peace in it—just the sound of the water splashing and the light, easy ring of her laugh. When she turned her head back toward the lake, distracted by another ripple, Arthur finally let his guard slip. His hardened gaze softened, the tension in his jaw finally giving way. The corner of his mouth twitched, pulling upward into the closest thing he’d had to a genuine smile in a year.
Though the moment was fleeting. Arthur looked down at the watch on his wrist and sighed. Her parents were expecting her soon, and he had a responsibility. With a sigh, his expression dropped to its usual, stoic form.
“Charlotte,” he called out to her.
“Huh?” Charlotte turned to him, watching as he reached for his cane. “Time to go already?”
“It’s gettin’ late.” The movie would have ended about now. Slowly, and very carefully, he’d raise himself to his feet, putting as much weight as he could on his left leg to do it. His right leg felt like a lead weight, a dull, throbbing reminder of why he shouldn't have stayed out in the damp night air this long.
Charlotte pulled herself up and stood a few feet away, her hands dusting popcorn crumbles and dirt off her dress. She looked like she wanted to reach out—her shoulders were tensed, her weight shifted toward him. “Arthur?”
"I can walk, Charlotte," he snapped, his voice low but losing none of its bite. He grunted, leaning into his cane, the wood feeling solid in his palm.
He didn't look at her as he began the slow, agonizing journey of dragging himself back to the car and toward the driver’s side door. Every step on the uneven grass was a gamble, a test of his pride that he wasn't sure he was winning.
Before he could reach the handle, his breath hitched with a sharp sound that he tried to swallow down. His right leg flared with a cold, biting ache that made him pause and lean heavily into his cane. Arthur could feel Charlotte’s eyes on his back, heavy with that silent, hovering concern that made his skin itch. He knew she wanted to reach out; he could practically feel the air shift as she stepped closer.
"Arthur—" Charlotte spoke out again, her tone laced with more concern than before.
"I said I can walk," he repeated, his voice a low, vibrating warning.
With a final, strained heave, he wrenched the heavy steel door open, the hinges groaning. He didn't wait for her to move. He simply just began the awkward, practiced shuffle of folding his frame into the seat, his injured leg moving like a piece of deadweight that he had to manually guide into the footwell.
He sat there for a moment, gripping the steering wheel, his chest heaving as he waited for the tremor in his hands to stop.
"Get in, Charlotte," he rasped impatiently into the dark, his hand shoving the key into the slot, turning it until the dashboard gauges hummed to life. "I ain’t stayin' out here all night." He didn't look at Charlotte as he reached out with his thumb, pressing the cold starter button.
With a soft, defeated sigh, Charlotte joined him, settling herself in the passenger seat as the engine rumbled with a vibrating idle that shook the floorboards. She kept still, her hands folded over the now-empty crumpled paper bag. The atmosphere from the vast moonlit lake contrasted heavily to the dark suffocating interior of the Ford next to a man who seemed to be receding back into his shell with every passing second.
Arthur shoved the floor shifter into gear and let the clutch out. The car lurched forward, tires crunching over the gravel and tall grass as he turned the nose of the Ford back toward the main road. The headlamps cut two yellow tunnels into the dark Georgia woods, and for a long time, the only sound was the wind whistling through the windows and the steady, unsympathetic drone of the engine.
Soon, they arrived back to their familiar suburb. Arthur gently halted the car in front of Charlotte’s home, parking close enough to the front door. The street was quiet, the amber glow of the porch lights casting long, still shadows across the manicured lawns.
He stared straight ahead through the windshield, his hands still gripped tight on the steering wheel. He didn't turn to look at her; he didn't even move to kill the ignition.
Charlotte sat there, the empty popcorn bag crinkling slightly in her lap as she shifted, waiting for him to say something.
"We're here," Arthur said, nearly like a reminder. His voice was flat, stripped of the small spark of life it had found by the water. He finally let go of the wheel, his right hand dropping heavily to his lap, where he began to unconsciously rub the stiff muscle just above the knee of his injured leg.
For a moment, she turned and looked at him, hesitating to leave.
“If it–...” She bit at her lip, trying to find the right words to say. “If it means anything–...I didn’t have a terrible time.” Charlotte showed a bit of a smile, attempting to lighten the somber mood.
Arthur scoffed and shook his head, nothing more. He just kept staring at the steering wheel, his fingers still kneading the dull ache in his thigh. The scoff was still hanging in the air, a sharp, ugly thing that made him want to apologize and drive away at the same time.
“Arthur, will you look at me?” Charlotte sat up, desperate for a proper conclusion to a chaotic night, even if he was the most infuriating man she’d ever met.
His eyes finally met with hers. He stared at her for a small moment. In the dim, amber glow of the dash, his eyes weren't angry anymore—they were just tired. Deeply, bone-wearily tired, like a man who had spent the last year holding up a ceiling that was slowly collapsing on him.
"I'm lookin' at you, Charlotte," he said, his voice dropping to a low, rough rasp.
“If you need– somebody to…” Charlotte trailed off. “Sit with in the dirt, I–” She shook her head, a frustrated huff escaping her as she realized how silly the words felt in the air. “If you want a friend, I'm here.”
She didn't wait for him to respond. She just gave him one last, small smile—the kind that didn't ask for anything in return—and clicked open the latch. The door swung open, letting in the humid night air and the distant sound of a neighbor’s dog barking.
“Goodnight,” she said softly.
Charlotte stepped out onto the curb, her heels clicking softly against the pavement as she hurried toward the porch. Arthur watched her through the glass, his hands frozen on the steering wheel. He stayed there, the engine’s low vibration rattling his teeth, until she disappeared behind the heavy oak door.
Arthur never said a word, but let out a breath as if he were holding one back. Somehow, the car felt twice as big and three times as cold the moment she was gone.
And when he finally parked himself into his own driveway and killed the ignition, the silence that followed was sudden and deafening, pressing in on his eardrums. He sat in the dark for a long beat, his hand still resting on the cold ignition key, staring at her darkened front door across the street for a reason he couldn’t find in himself to understand.
Before he’d leave, Arthur looked down at the passenger seat, spotting a single white kernel of popcorn tucked into the crease of the leather. He reached over, and let one of his ever-trembling fingers reach out to flick it away into the footwell.
But somehow, he couldn’t; he simply withdrew his hand, leaving the small, pale mark of their night exactly where she’d left it.
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I remember your first draft of the first chapter and this story has been sitting with one review for a while. Let’s see what you’ve got in store~
Wait, it’s chapter 3 but you called it chapter 4?
I like the summary; it’s very succinct. I need to take notes :3
I really like your first paragraph, from the double “No one spoke” (oh the impact!) to the rhythm… It’s such a great start, settles me right in!
Love this phrasing: “looking into the eyes of a ghost from the past.”
But I’m confused. If he’s actually trying this time, why phrase it with “he did not care whether to impress Charlotte”. I know it’s for his parents, but this phrasing is kinda odd. Pulled me out of the story just for the seeming contradiction. Might be the “bare minimum” phrase tho
I find it a bit strange that he would curse in front of this girl so readily. I guess it’s bc he’s not really that concerned with keeping appearances around her where his parents are none the wiser?
I think I had a small heart attack when I saw the bananas thing. You know you can just edit the chapter and remove it? Pls pls do so, it was so jarring @.@
But even before that, I feel like your work lost this… hmm spark. Right now, all your phrasings sound a bit stiff and generic, too many adjectives and stuff.
Idk my guy, you’re doing the thing right now xd “To Arthur, it was a painful look into a world he’d never have again.” I know it’s not completely the same and you can’t really see it bc depression but look at you right now with a beautiful gal and all (Shhh I love talking to the charas in the story)
It seems you have a few favourite phrases this chapter, “fixed on the rear view mirror” and anything with crunching gravel. But I do like how you manage to show that the sounds especially trigger some PTSD (Even if he’s probably neither recognizing that nor would he call it that)
“The only thing he wanted to do was leave.” Awww ☹ Poor guy.
Hmm it feels a little as if Charlotte is a bit too understanding of the situation. I need to observe her some more.
I also wish you would have described the scene a bit better. That is probably a me thing but I’ve never been to a drive in cinema so idk how stuff works and was surprised by this window speaker thingie.
Ok you lost me a bit on this phrase “the ghost of his injured leg”… I thought the leg’s still there so… what does that mean?
And this is like the third time Charlotte’s been described as delicate this chapter… If Alex can complain abt my green fire, I feel like I can complain abt that here XD
Hmmm they’re watching a romance, why was a car misfiring on screen then?
Oh! Kidnapping the girl now XD “I’m takin' us somewhere else”
I do like that she forces him to call her by her given name and also to leave the car XD
I do not like him policing her every move and how he’s not called out for that.
In general, despite them leaving the movie early… I don’t feel like I was all that invested in what was happening there. I really liked the first paragraph but then… idk, it feels like there was conflict missing. Nothing really happened and for the sharp reaction to the noise, you also didn’t really lean into the emotional aspects. It kinda makes me personally feel disconnected to what’s happening. I guess this is realistic so good job on that.
Love the phrasing “acting like a pill”
Oh that is also a cool phrasing: “They picked a hell of a rotten timber for it”
That said, huh, I thought he was calling himself that? Yet Charlotte reacts with: “Won’t you quit calling me that?”
Was it proper back then for a girl and a boy to just be friends? Considering that’s apparently the motivation of Charlotte’s parents?
You think fish like popcorn?” That is a very cute image =D I can see where this is going and it makes me happy.
I like this paragraph and especially this phrasing: “ heavy with that silent, hovering concern that made his skin itch.”
Huch, is that really grammatically sound? “Soon, they arrived back to their familiar suburb”
I’m curious abt Charlotte specifically saying the night is a disaster earlier and now, she’s like “it wasn’t that terrible”. I kinda wish she wouldn’t have said the disaster thing earlier, bc she seemed so self-conscious around him before.
I do like that he leaves the popcorn in his car, aww!
Hmm I don’t think I really felt a good connection to your characters tho. Mainly because it feels like their relationship fluctuates so widely and the narration “tells” us that he’s infuriating but you never really show how that impacts Charlotte. She’s so understanding and stuff the whole time, despite you giving us glimpses into her thoughts.
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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the macabre S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - Arthur and Charlotte go out to the drive-in for a date, but things go horribly wrong when Arthur is reminded of his past, so he drives Charlotte over to the pond, where things are slightly calmer than before.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I’m a little confused with the part about using bananas for criticism in this chapter, but if you meant to keep that in, then you may ignore this.
Chocolate Bar - I love how you described Arthur smiling a little bit when he saw Charlotte feeding the fish and then how he hesitated to get rid of the popcorn, because just a little bit, he is starting to enjoy her company. It may not be something he is entirely proud of or feels like he’s deserving of, but he still feels it.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a wonderful fourth chapter! I enjoyed reading this and I will be sure to read more chapters of this when you get to posting them. I’m excited to see where Arthur and Charlotte’s relationship will go from here. And now…
I wish you an awesome day/night! ^v^
Haha i'm super glad you like it!!
With the bananas thing-- that's from here!! I have NO idea how that got there! Maybe I must have accidentally copy and pasted that while doing some reviews on here, I have NO idea, but it's from a YWS review challenge. Thanks for spotting that! How embarrassing! HAHA
Chapter five is in the works! Thank you so much for your support! I'll get it out over the coming days! <3
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