Published November 2, 2011
If I were to write a love song
I will tell the world of You
If I were to make a sonnet
I will declare Your wonders
If I were to say “I Love You”
I will tell it to you, My Precious
If I were to utter, “I’m Sorry”
I will cry beneath Your feet
If I were to bid farewell
I will wholly follow You
If I were to go at my deep slumber
I will welcome it with arms open
If I were to proclaim one thing
I will say that I am blessed
For I am Your inspiration
While walking and carrying the Cross
If I were to see you now
I would rather be with You
Than to spend a thousand days
In this deceitful and painful world
If I were to be with my Maker
I will jump with joy and kneel down
For life is indeed a journey
A journey that will lead me to my home
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This is amazing. Keep up the good work there
Helloo!!!
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You're new!! Welcome!!!
Now, for the poem.
^I whole heartedly agree with that. Even I thought it was a lover at the beginning. But then I read the end. You had me lost for words. No joke.
Though, you need punctuation. Work on that, and your poem will be excellent!
If you need help, ask me! I don't mind notifications.
~HPR~
Lovely. This proves that poems don't have to rhyme to engage their readers. I love the fact that the reader thinks your referring to a lover until the final stanza. That's when we find out that you were in fact referring to God (am i right?). You should definitely keep writing and be as creative as you can!!