Young Writers Society

I appreciated the formatting towards the end, it really added something to the poem as a whole. The different descriptions of the lights put a certain image in my head. This also helped me connect it to human nature. However, the whole thing feels like two different poems only barely connected with the last line.

Hello,

The ideas of these poems are nicely written out! Even though there aren't any titles, I feel like I can make my own interpretation of both of these poems. In my opinion, both of these poems seem connected to form one setting... and I'm imagining a creepy basement where you are trying to fix maybe a furnace xD.

Anyway, these each line is short and flows nicely to the next, and these two poems have good imagery. I also like how you repeated the line "None light up inside" to add some effect.

The only thing I would consider is the first poem...
The second poem has good descriptions to actually give readers a clear idea of what you are talking about. But, I'm sort of confused on the idea of the first poem. Maybe you could add more length to it?

Overall, this is a nice collection of poems, and I hope to see you writing more!

Keep Writing.

Hi @LittleTooArrogant I am here to do a reel quick review on your poem. So I think that it was lovely. Every line went well to gather. Also I believe I have some really easy name ideas for both you poems.

Lines I like most

Low lying shines

Silent yet loud leaks,