Published April 22, 2010
Do you feel the adrenaline coursing through your veins?
Help me break these binds and chains.
We've got to get out, we've got to be free.
Before they find us; absentee.
Can we really escape?
Are things in good shape?
Moonlight is glistening.
Are you listening?
Run baby, run.
Let's do the things they said can't be done.
Watch you words, be sly and clever.
There isn't a pain that lasts forever.
It's my first poem. The last line I wrote at 2 a.m, the first two I just came up with.
Devour it.
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
141,298 Literary Works • 674,335 Reviews
Hello LittlePetRock, my name is CaptianRandom.
i liked this poem, i think it was good but not great i think you shouldn't rhyme it, i think that put it off a little, it would have flown more if it didn't, Other than that i liked it. also i dint want to be to mean sorry if i was I'm not really a pro but great first poem.
-CaptianRandom
This was good. I especially loved the last verse. I can't really think of anything bad to say about it, so good job.
Fantastic! For your first poem this is incredible (it's far better then my first poem might I add
). There's so much emotion going on in this. And for some reason the line "we've got to be free." really struck home for me. Well, wrapping up this review, I have to say great job and I hope to see more poetry from you in the future. 
LOVE THIS. :] Keep on writing!
I like it! Usually first poems are less than fantastic, but this was cute. Rhyming is difficult to carry off successfully, but I think this poem was kept short, cute and simple, and it works very well overall. I’m glad you didn’t try to over complicate things and get a “perfect” poem with meter and rhyming, etc, etc. Good job! I hope to see more of your poetry!
~Yoyo
How could you ever think this was lame?! Its not just because i love poetry, honest! This has a good rhyme scheme and is very meaningful! The title fits perfectly and I absolutely love this!
~Cassi
hey there, LittlePet!
I liked your poem. The rhyming's good and the concept of "Escape" was really obvious to the fact that it was the "emotion" flowing throughout the poem. While I was reading this, I thought this would be also good if it was turn into a hard core music! hehe...
Keep writing!
Peace out!