Hi Lim,
Mailice here with a short review!
My first impression after reading it was very positive and had to hold back my short giggle a bit in the break room when the reveal came.
You manage to tell a very funny but also exciting story with a certain ease. If the story wasn't in the humour category, it would certainly have turned into a kind of "horror", especially when the pink glove was no longer at the garden fence. You wrote the story in a very relaxed way, and in a meticulous way you moved the plot forward. Because you had a good insight into the first person narrator, you could only see and read what she presented.
While I don't think you've dealt with any kind of perceptual distortion here and just want to talk about the possible consequences of myopia, it does show how easy it is to mislead the reader by only mentioning once what it could be a rather than checking what it is. (I mean, I didn't question the narrator's insight.) Of course, I liked the little detail of the daughter not mentioning the glove, but just asking if "that's yours".
Compared to Miscreants you used a much simpler style to introduce this humour, otherwise I think it would be very hard to follow the story. What I liked very much here was also this relaxed mood that was always maintained and that the narrator questions herself instead of someone else. (Why didn't she talk to John about it? Didn't he ask why there was a flamingo missing? Why am I worrying so much about this now...?)
One thing that still boggles my mind a bit now is the number of fingers and possible limbs a flamingo has. With the neck and the two legs and possibly a short tail, I only come up with four possible fingers. I guess I'll have a sleepless night now until I look for an inflatable flamingo on the internet.
Two points I noticed while reading:
The pink glove lay on the ground, almost covered by a sheet of snow. But I could see the fingertips peek out just so.
That almost rimmed.

In the evenings, my daughter sat in the living room to paint.
Isn't here a "s" too much by evenings?
Have fun writing!
Mailice
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