Young Writers Society

Hello, here's a review.

I'm not a poet. I say that every time I review poetry. It's because I'm not and I don't want offend anyone.

I liked the love aspect of this poem. The way you portrayed it gave it much more meaning than I was ever looking for. I'm not the lovey kind of girl, but I enjoyed reading this work of art. The word selection really intrigued me. It felt, to me, like she wanted his love in a needing kind of way, and I've never seen that before.

AnnMath leaving once again for another sculpture of words.

Hello, here's a review.

I'm not a poet. I say that every time I review poetry. It's because I'm not and I don't want offend anyone.

I liked the love aspect of this poem. The way you portrayed it gave it much more meaning than I was ever looking for. I'm not the lovey kind of girl, but I enjoyed reading this work of art. The word selection really intrigued me. It felt, to me, like she wanted his love in a needing kind of way, and I've never seen that before.

AnnMath leaving once again for another sculpture of words.

HEELLO Lightning North,
A song about needing your true love. When I first saw the name, the song "Let Me Love You" by Justin Bieber suddenly came to mind. I don't know why, it just did.

You could add something more creative to the song. I'm not saying it isn't good- every song is unique- but the love concept has been repeated and repeated in most songs. I like that third to last line where you mentioned "sin". Not many songs do that so that's a starter.

I noticed it's your first day here. Congrats on your first post! I only found YWS a few days ago so I know where you stand.

Keep writing,

Night Kaizer