Published September 7, 2011
~Chorus~
Listen to me
I've got nothing to do
I've got nowhere to go
This is how I live my day
Listen to me
I've got no one to see
I've got nowhere to be
This is how I live my life
Please, take it away
I live so close to you
The day's a suicide
Waiting for me
I don't know what to do
Your face, my suicide
In full waiting
I can hear you laughing
As I sit here with nothing to do
To me I'm normal, to you I'm not
I want you to fuck off
My hate can smell your precious soul
Draining me somehow and feeding you
So sink, I sink
Just down and down
My life is empty
(chorus)
I feel so close to you
Despite my agony
Grinding inside
I want to feel your face
But raped by vanity
Still thrusting deep
And I will bleed from this
The scar will always be exposed
I rot in a dark room
My face stuck to barbed wire on the window
From each look away more flesh peels off
No matter my choices, I'm still fucked
By a bitch like you forcing the thrust much deeper
For I am too pussy to kill myself
So can you please just go - That, or fucking finish me off?
Your life is plenty
(chorus x2)
Fucking, listen to me
I've got nothing to say
I've got nowhere to die
This is how I end my day
Listen to me
I get nothing I want
I've got nothing but pain
This is how you'll end my life
...and sink and soak
...and sink and soak
...I soak all of the pain.
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You're really talented....Your usage of words is really good! While I was reading it I felt that there's a beat within the words. I just wanted to give u some notices. You should end some of your lines with rhyming words, because like that, it's hard to give it a rhythm if it is turned into a song!
This is really deep. I can totally see this as a song. Like the rating implies, it is a little disturbing, but I still like it
It's very raw, and very real. 
"My face stuck to barbed wire on the window
From each look away more flesh peels off" <-- I liked this part the most
Keep writing! I hope to read more of your work