Hey there Liberty, here to review your poem as requested!
I interpret is poem to be about a speaker who is having trouble writing, so much that they write nothing and then in an ironic twist say that writing nothing is going to win them the contest, but at the last line they say, "just kidding" and reveal they don't have much confidence in their piece afterall.
So the theme of writer's block is certainly a popular theme for poetry, and I have to say I think it's a really hard theme to do well, because it's hard to make the poem seem significant and difficult to say something original with a theme that's been done so many times.
I think you're back and forth humor at the end, and the hint of a challenge/contest make the theme a bit more original, but you haven't quite made the poem seem significant yet. -- If you were able to make the writing process, the contest, or poetry seem more important in the actual poem it would make the poem itself seem more important as well. Sometimes I have written these sorts of pieces and linked the writing process with knowing ones' self, or knowing truth, and that seems to make the poem seem a bit more substantial.
On the humor aspect, I'm not sure the little turn at the end worked from the immediate "here's the best poem ever" to "just kidding" -> you need to extend the "it's the best ever" part a bit longer so that the reader's expectations are aligned to thinking one thing, and then their expectations are totally challenged.
My personal preference is also that the ellipses didn't add too much, because they didn't add drama or meaning, but were more of a distraction.
I think the casual, simple language was fine for communicating a rather straight forward theme, but you could make the poem pop a little more by adding some imagery or figurative language. - this would also make the poem sound more original.
That's about all I had!
Good luck in editing, and please ask questions about my review if something wasn't clear, or you wanted more feedback on a particular area.
alliyah
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