Hi Leys,
I normally don't review essays, but this looked like an interesting read-- and it was! The essay is short, but it's poignant. The message is meaningful, and it represents society in a gray light.
I noticed that there are a couple of things that can be improved on.
...but to cost of thyself, is it really worth it?
I think because "thyself" an archaic word, and we only see it in historical literature, the word looks out of place. If this was written in the perspective of a historical figure (well-known or not) it wouldn't look so noticeable. Also, the word "you" is used way more in the essay, making "thyself" feel unnecessary.
The point being made with unattractiveness can be elaborated on a little more. It doesn't feel like there's enough substance to argue or show why the unattractive thing is the bravest thing man could do.
I think the essay has a great voice! It feels very elegant yet lively. The juxtaposition of selfishness vs. selflessness is presented well, and you bring up some good points.
Do you read a lot of 19th or 20th century literature? I can see some inspiration in your writing style
Good job on this!
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