Zhar’tok of the Z’yran Conclave; Official Z'yran Conclave Historian
I am Zhar’tok, a member of the Z’yran Conclave, one of the many species that have existed across the vast expanse of the Greater Galaxy. As you read these words, know that you are not merely exploring a collection of stories—these are the living histories, the myths, the memories of beings who have come before you, and perhaps, in some distant future, will never be heard again.
The stars you see in the sky are not just distant points of light; they are beacons to the endless stories that have shaped the galaxy. From the earliest whispers of creation to the pulse of the latest battle between empires, the lives of countless species have unfolded beneath the gaze of the heavens.
In these tales, you will encounter beings unlike yourselves, some wise, some foolish; some peaceful, others driven by the fires of war. You will hear of empires that rose and crumbled, of uncharted worlds discovered and lost, of forgotten technologies buried beneath layers of time. It is my hope that these accounts will give you a glimpse into the complexities of existence as seen through the eyes of beings from every corner of the galaxy.
As an alien, it is my duty and privilege to preserve these stories—each one a thread in the intricate tapestry that binds our galaxy together. And though we are separated by species, language, and time, there is something universal in the act of telling a story. It is through these tales that we connect with one another, even across the vast distances of space.
These histories are not mine alone. They belong to all who have gazed upon the stars and wondered what lies beyond. As you embark on this journey, may you find resonance in the stories of the Greater Galaxy—and may you come to understand that, in the end, we are all part of the same grand narrative.
—Zhar’tok of the Z’yran Conclave
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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the morbid S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - A member of the Z’yran Conclave is going to tell us stories of everyone in the greater galaxy. All of the different species and their many hopes, dreams, fears and frights. It is a collection of many lives and each one holds its own importance.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, then you may.
Chocolate Bar - I love how the narrator of this prologue, an alien, goes on to tell us that we are all connected, no matter what species we are and where we come from. It’s touching to know that everyone is all linked throughout the galaxy and I do hope that everyone will be able to tell their stories throughout the chapters.
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a wonderful way to start off the story! I wonder if we will learn more about this alien and if there shall be a bigger story for the narrator or if they’re just there to share the story. I’m excited to read more of everybody’s lives and POVs and I cannot wait for the journeys of these characters to begin. With that being said…
I wish you a fantastical day/night!
This story is amazing, a true work of art. I love the way it is told from the perspective of an alien, like he is archiving the history of this galaxy for us. The diction, imagery, the way that you describe the histories, it is all perfect. I cannot find a single fault in this work.
Originally i was gonna critique Zhar'tok referring to themselves as an alien since we'd be the alien to them, but it actually makes sense since it's being presented to us, and they're the alien from our perspective. This is one of the first stories I've read on this site and i feel lucky that i got this one!
- An unnamed doctor
Heya! It may not be autumn yet, but that doesn't mean that Kay can't stop y and leave a review for your amazing piece!
Alright, right for a beginning: it's not a secret that I have a soft spot for sci-fi, world building and storytelling. And your piece managed to combine everything I love, which meant that I really enjoyed reading it! But let's get down to business (two defeat the huns!) and review this great opening!
Yes, I tried to pronounce it. Yes, I failed epically.
This is an incredibly strong beginning, in my opinion, that immediately makes it clear to the reader what this is about - stories! From the first sentence, we have your narrative voice stabilized, which immediately grabbed me. In the first paragraph, you managed to beautifully outline an extremely interesting premise for us and you immediately won me over.
This sentence particularly caught my eye - you create almost poetic descriptions with complete ease using simple literary devices. A similar writing style runs throughout the work, but I decided to highlight this sentence because it really touched me.
I love the idea you're putting forward here. That stories are a universal language that everyone can speak - and that this is true for aliens too! As someone who grew up on stories from all corners of the world, I have to agree with you. YWS itself is a great example of how people love to create stories and share them with each other. We've always told stories and that's what makes us who we are.
BI'll be honest: if I were to highlight and comment on every part I liked about this work, I'd just quote the entire work and write you a thirty-page essay, in which I'll end up repeating myself endlessly anyway. So I'll try to summarize: this work is wonderful and I'll definitely be happy to continue reading Chronicles of Greater Galaxy! You have an incredible storytelling talent - I immediately fell in love with your style of writing.
You don't use long sentences, but they are written almost poetically and read incredibly smoothly. I didn't catch any grammatical errors, although there is a possibility that this is simply because I was too absorbed in every word of this work. I think I can say without shame that this is one of the best works I have come across at YWS so far (and I've been here for some time!)
Have a nice rest of day/night/whatever is in your timezone and stay safe!
- your local (friendly?) crow Kay
This is one of the most amazing works that I have ever read, which is why I won't review it. I only review stories when I have critique on them, and for the first time in my life, I read a work that I can't find any faults in.
I love the voice with which it is told. The story is written smoothly and easy to read. I look forward to your upcoming works.
-Mask