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“Tomorrow is one of the most important days of your training, Pups” the teacher said.”You will get to-” Caelum, sitting in his usual seat in the very back let out a loud snore, interrupting the teacher, and making the entire class laugh. “Though to some of you, it doesn’t seem so important,” the teacher said loudly. “Caelum!” Caelum jumped up as he heard his name called, making the class laugh even harder, but after realizing it was only the teacher laid his head back down.
“Sit up!” the teacher growled, slapping his switch down on Caelum’s hand. Caelum sat up resentfully, rubbing the back of his hand while glaring at his teacher. “I swear, pup, if you gave the effort you do on tests and sword training to fixing your attitude you could be an Alpha in a few years.” The teacher turned away and began talking about what was going to happen tomorrow, but once again, Caelum spaced out. He stared at the opposite wall, only catching every other word.
Well this is off to an interesting start here right off the bat. The situation seems ordinary enough, just someone that's spaced out a little as they are in what seems to be a bit of a classroom situation but the words there that are clearly no consistent with the normal human classrooms situation we are so used to hearing about making this much more unique and much more interesting. Loving this start so far.
Caelum didn’t even realize class was over till he saw people began to leave. Getting up he ran to the door out of the class as fast as he could. He was almost free until . . . “Caelum, I would like to have a word with you.” Caelum sighed, turned around, and walked in front of the desk.
As soon as the last person was out the door, the teacher said, “What did I tell you guys today?”
“Don’t know,” Caelum said, not bothering to lie.
“As I thought,” the teacher sighed. “Caelum, I wish you would try, I really do. You excel in everything you do, but you don’t have the attitude of a leader. You sleep in class, you slack off during combat training, and you show direct disregard for authority. You can do good, I know it. Tomorrow is the day you get to choose your first weapon, a great milestone for all pups. All I ask is that you show up on time.”
Okayy...that's a cool little discussion there. I think you manage to bring out what appear to be quite a few important plot point there and hints at our protagonist personality without making it sound too much like it was all simple being laid out to us. You managed to balance the exposition part of that little conversation with the part that made sense for that situation pretty well I think.
“Is that all?” Caelum asked, not bothering to hide his impatience.
“Yes, you may go.” Caelum was out the door and onto the Pack Grounds before the teacher could finish the entire sentence.
Well that indicates this one's personality rather well. It seems he's not someone that's too interested in whatever is being taught here at all and is rather dismissive to the point of being very clearly quite rude there. Not the most likeable of traits to see in a protagonist first up but its an interesting flaw that I assume probably is there for a reason so let's see where this goes.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
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Harry
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