Published January 8, 2012
I always try my best
to fit in with the rest
But no one likes me
so dear can't you see
I'm just a stand out
that makes them want to shout
Maybe it's not so bad
because I'm me and I'm Glad
So dear why can't you see
I'm happy to be me
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Hi Lashea.
I think this poem is okay. It's not really amazing, but it's not terrible either. I think it just needs to have more added to it and more poetic language as well. Add similes, metaphors, feelings and description. The rhymed worked out okay, but if that's what stopping you from making this poem sparkle it doesn't have to have it in it.
You need to add full stops at the ends of your sentences. That's all I could notice for grammar.
I liked the idea of being a stand out, but liking who you are. You're trying to get someone to realise that you do try to fit in, but you're happy with who you are.
Deanie x