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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
First Impression: Well this seems like its the start to what could be quite a fun read...and its seems like a simple enough concept to work out, of course it might get complicated later, but for now, this seems to work with the universe well enough. At any rate, it was fun to read.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Narcissa glanced out the window, as their driver, Mr. Hogan half ranted half lectured them.
“Alright look, you can't phone me a million times a week, and no texts. None nine, and whatever the other words for no are.”
Well that's a fun place to start. I can definitely imagine Happy saying that and it also makes for a really fun little intro so that's always a plus.
She tuned out his lecture, as she gazed at the impressive cement building. “So this is the avengers…” she whispered, the slight tinge of a french Canadian accent on her comment.
Narcissa flicked her eyes back to the driver, he's finally stopped his tirade, and was in fact looking in the rearview mirror at them,” Clear?” He flicked his eye back to the one-way road in front of them.
‘Perfectly,” it seemed this lecture had stemmed from another younger avenger he had been associated with. Paraphs she'd take a look at his memories later. The car slowed, she straightened her black suit jacket and brushed the similarly coloured jeans.
Getting started with the references early, I like the sound of that. And if I can stop getting reminded of Narcissa Malfoy I think I like the sounds of this main character here, I'm thinking this Narcissa is the intern here...and is an OC.
Her 14-year-old brother, shifted in the seat beside her, peering through her window at the big glass windows covering a large part of the front of the building,” Ready Nar?” He turned the rings on his fingers. He often did that, others thought it was from nervousness, but more often he did it when he knew things were going to change. Things have changed a lot lately.
I'll be honest, Nar...really doesn't have the same ring to it that Nat does...although I suppose it works...that name does not leave you with too many options.
“As ready as one can be to be a part of the avengers.” She watched Mr hogan stepped out of the car and meet a rather arrogant-looking man. She raised a brow, the man the myth the legend, Tony stark.
Tony looked over his dark sunglasses at the backseat windows, then strode over and opened Narcissa’s door, she slid out.
Well...at least he's alive in this universe, I definitely like how that turned out.
“Miss Monet,” he nodded a greeting, shaking her ringed hand, then turned to Leonard and repeated the greeting.
Tony titled his head at Mr. Hogan who was digging their bags out of the trunk. “Happy got you bags, follow me.”
Okay...seems to be okay there...fairly simple introduction there, and I think that fits the idea here so far...of course to see what actually ends up happening I would have to read more. This is the very beginning after all it appears.
“Well, a hand would be nice?” Happy lugged a suitcase out.
“Not what I hired you for.'' Tony strode through the automatic glass doors, Narcissa's chunky boot steps echoing through the open space inside. The building seemed to loom over her
Okay...not quite sure if the last two bits of dialogue were terribly in character...but then it has been a while since I watched the movies, so Imma just roll with it. It is still very early in the story after all.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this was a nice little chapter one here. A bit on the shorter side, but that's never really an issue. Anyway...I think I see there's a part two....so I will probably read that too...eventually
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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