i wish my youth would last just one heartbeat longer

by LadyBug

Published October 17, 2022

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HikariHateke
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HikariHateke wrote a review Review · Oct 21, 2022

your title was what spoke to me and pulled me in, I wasnt disappointed this is amazing and definitely relatable.

Growing up feels so slow and then all of a sudden it's going way too fast and you're really not prepared for it or the feelings that come with that realization.

There's hope and regret and fear and just everything other emotions you can think of.

Lovely poem! 💖

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Oct 18, 2022

Such a pretty poem speaking the truth about growing up! It’s like you are expected to know everything and be ready for all that the real world will bring, yet you find yourself still tethered to childhood, not quite pulling towards adulthood, yet ready to leave behind old ideals. The hazy confusion called life, mirrored through this poem, seeping into the page and engraved in all hearts and minds.

I wish you an amazing day/night.

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LUNARGIRL
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LUNARGIRL wrote a review Review · Oct 17, 2022

Hey, LunarGirl here!
Just wanted to say that I was immediately ensnared by the title of your poem. It really resonated with me and I thought it brought out a lot of emotion. I also really liked your formatting and how each line started with "I" and then the person believing, wishing, etc. about something.

I would say my favorite part was;

and i was too busy missing what i never had to notice.
i wish my youth would last just one heart beat longer,

It makes me think of how when we are younger there are so many things we miss in life because we don't think they are important and we are more focused on the future and on growing up faster. And then when you are all grown up, you feel regret over all the things you missed out on and you want to go back to those carefree days of your childhood. But this is just my interpretation of it.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem and I thought you did a great job writing it. Keep up the great work!

Carpe diem,
LunarGirl



Almost all absurdity of conduct rises from the imitation of those whom we cannot resemble.
— Samuel Johnson